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You Never Said Yes
By frileyma
I kiss you
Promises
Poor communication
How did you know
Promises were only
Slightly better
Than lies?
Is that why
You wouldn't listen
Or is it the way
My lips kissing
My promises
Are always lies?
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© 2005 frileyma
Published on Friday, October 21, 2005.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "You Never Said Yes"
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On Thursday, October 27, 2005, redtearswhitesnow
(79)
wrote:
slightly better than lies eh?this is so short but it speaks volumes.The last four lines are like a puzzle..i play them over in my head and it just hurts.Its there in the truth yet it is so far away from being solved.this is written very well.
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A former member wrote:
I agree with both ErrOr and Condemable Passions....you have taken a message normally stated in no less than twenty lines (at the very LEAST) and said it in no more than fifteen. Wonderful job. *Evangel*
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On Friday, October 21, 2005, Err0r
(358) wrote:
I think very few can capture what they want to say in so little of words...you I feel have accomplished it. Nice write. :)
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On Friday, October 21, 2005, LovelyAssassinx
(151) wrote:
I love this piece. "How did you know, promises were only slightly better than lies?" Thats my favorite part...its sooo true. Wonderful write.~Sara
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