My version: Eat fool Eat

By DeathSentance

When you cry you eat up the pain
You take in all you can
You will explode once you start to cry
With all the problems you've had
It floats inside and kills you
Reminds you of all the bad times
When you're nervous you stuff your face with food
You stuff your heart with pain
But in you dreams
you can never stop crying, never stop hurting, an eternity of the worst that could happen
You never go neer another soul again
You will not eat up the pain
But in your nightmares you don't stop crying while your love says "eat fool eat"

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Copyright 2004 DeathSentance
Published on Monday, January 19, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • physicalgraffiti On Sunday, February 15, 2004, physicalgraffiti (56)By person wrote:

    nice metaphors...dont feel bad about the spelling...i suck too. Loved the piece anyway.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Sunday, February 1, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    kina untastefull. but maybe thats the point. liked it. and do as roachie says. spell check .o)

  • Johny_D_Lewis On Monday, January 19, 2004, Johny_D_Lewis (467)By person wrote:

    alot to take, some times to much pain..."neer" is spelled near but otherwise well written

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