Sister Rain [punch up]

By chrome arctic

Saw the insects move around inside your eyes
The irritant of slits ripping open,
below your scalp
And I can sense sister rain
Spelling out numbers, counting out words
Hid in the blue shadows of evening
Avoiding the days’ cold, judging light
No time for sentiment
Sister rain covers my doubt with need
Making no errors
Sister rain sets precision tripwires
Sidewalk steam masks suicides

Taken at their word, an addict's guarantee
Fabric that had strung coherent thoughts linear,
ripped like tissue
Once red skies anger to black voids
Below the pressure we splinter like wood
Too late for any new trust in here
Sand is spilling from my stricken head
No use for a realists
Sister rain crawls down my window and spine
Asterisk promises
Sister Rain’s jealousy of oceans
Burning in lifeboats, hopes of mine

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© 2008 chrome arctic
Published on Thursday, March 13, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: I really liked the ending great job. Gave me some chills down my spine, really great job.

  • insideout On Friday, April 25, 2008, insideout (47)By person wrote:

    This sends shivers up my spine, nicely done.

  • A former member wrote: That first stanza is amazing. You have a good lead in writing, if that makes sense. each of your lines flow well into the next. The first stanza is a prime example of this. Cheers dude.

  • Niemand On Thursday, March 13, 2008, Niemand (355)By person wrote:

    *shudders*

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