Comments by stormtalk
- "Ooo. Love-ly. I think this is my favorite of your newer writes; it's seductive and hard-hitting, like an anvil shaped like lingerie."
Posted by stormtalk on "you make me feel" by Exodus
- "Your work always makes me think "ethereal"; I'm not sure why. But this was colorful, detached, a disaessembled assembly of sad thoughts... nicely written."
Posted by stormtalk on "ash." by Exodus
- "Love the stairs image... and... "Every little thing's/ Gonna be allriiighttt""
Posted by stormtalk on "chance." by Exodus
- "I like the last line, of course ;) The rest of it was less clear than your usual work, but exercises in disassociation from normal word combinations are always fun. It's good, but I think you could make it better by clarifying it."
Posted by stormtalk on "still" by Exodus
- "The third line is genius - I'm impressed about the extent to which you realize the threat quantifying things holds. Sometimes... it's fun to get stuck in the spiderweb."
Posted by stormtalk on " dark." by Exodus
- "This is quite beautiful, but sometimes difficult to piece together as a whole. Heliotrope, milk white leaves, oleander - these are great words. This is not as bad as you think!"
Posted by stormtalk on "Heliotrope" by Exodus
- "Colorful as a Quetzacoatl! Oddly, the addition of the -'s between stanzas added a lot, too; I like how it looks. I could spend all day reading some of your poems..."
Posted by stormtalk on "::i n f a m y:: virgin roses." by Exodus
- "This would make a beautiful song, perhaps reminiscent of Evanescence... I've missed your writing... I'm off to read more. Great work on this, it's gorgeous."
Posted by stormtalk on "you //completely// love me." by Exodus
- "The isolation you articulate flows over me like a wave... I feel where you are all too well... and the puzzle at the end is all too obvious for me... your writing is no less than beautiful."
Posted by stormtalk on "isolate" by Exodus
- "A haunting and beautiful phantasmagoria... short and powerful... I've read it no less than 5 times, now... great write!"
Posted by stormtalk on "built" by Exodus
- "Well said... the first part lost me once or twice, but after re-reading it, I think I understand better... your image of light pouring through the blinds was well done, and there's something dream-like/haunting about the whole thing that makes it awesome."
Posted by stormtalk on "in this blood - i drown above you." by Exodus
- "Beautiful and paradoxical in its convoluted efficiency. Too many interesting lines to mention... like the shapes of molten lead taking form on a pane of glass..."
Posted by stormtalk on "lead" by Exodus
- "Interesting ending, and the line Purr mentioned - as well as "sun shining shred of your soul" - are both awesome. And I like the idea of wrapping someone in ivy... why the x between sun and shining, though?"
Posted by stormtalk on "it is give." by Exodus
- "Simple and meaningful, unlike you?! You monkey fece! Hehe... just kidding... I read the sentence after ;)"
Posted by stormtalk on "the taste. i know" by Exodus
- "Hah, that's awesome. Short, driven, and cutting. "The ball is in/ My court/ it is your turn/ To feel it tear right out of you" is great... it sounds like you're talking about ripping out hearts, which is a favorite pasttime of mine."
Posted by stormtalk on "the taste. i know" by Exodus
- "Ahhh, a raw emotion vomit session! I love these, they're some of your best. You're dark... dirty... strange... different... and better than the rest for it!"
Posted by stormtalk on "in side" by Exodus
- "Oo, fun. I like how you call him a machine... yet, there's something mechanical about your punctuation. Whether intentional or not... very cool."
Posted by stormtalk on "full" by Exodus
- "Mmm, fun rhythym. Choppy, but with a lot of hidden rhymes. I likes it! "Broken needles washed up on paradise" hits home, too... I remember a couple of years ago, I found a hypodermic needle on the beach in front of my house, heh."
Posted by stormtalk on "wounded" by Exodus
- ""Too dirty to understand" is interesting... just the concept of something being "dirty" is something that always intrigued me. What is dirt?... what's wrong with it?... it's such a strange thing... good work, you got me thinking ;)"
Posted by stormtalk on "white" by Exodus
- ""World of napkins, soak my lies" is fucking cool, and "I loathe the love" has a great ring to it. Goddam. Too many good lines to mention. I like this one a lot... I've been missing out since I've been gone!!"
Posted by stormtalk on "lie" by Exodus
- "I see what 669 means about the flow - it'd sound great sung. I like the naiad/ocean theme, its a good metaphor. The "angels" part is good, but it doesn't seem consistent with the rest of the poem. I like the ending... nothing like despair!"
Posted by stormtalk on "naiad (repost)" by Exodus
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