Comments by Dilated View

"I felt that this read almost chaotically, but in a great way. The back and forth where I couldn't really tell if "I" and "you" were many or one, and the same. Or many but one. That's the beauty of it. We are all particles waiting to return to source, maybe to arrive again and contribute to the orchestra. Maybe the things we dislike in others we dislike because they are brethren so we feel like they should know better, like their chaos is disrupting us all as one in this dream that we dream. I thought the concept was really cool and the structure and delivery as well. It's not always easy to look at the positives when there is so much negativity everywhere you look, but I've heard that whatever one focuses on they're sure to find, for better or worse. Nicely done! "
Posted by Dilated View on "Day 1-20,334 // Dream" by Shikiryu

"The absolute chaos and rage in this was astounding. I've worked with people who behave this way professionally rather than with your home family and it is absolutely sickening. Everyone is a stepping stone to the goal that can't be reached for people like this because they always move the goal post and are never satisfied with their wake of destruction. As for the structure of the poem itself your rhyme scheme was great and kept the flow going from start to finish. Very well written format and content wise. Awesome job!"
Posted by Dilated View on "Wrong Turn" by Just Dave

"This is an outlook that I think many, myself included, could adopt and use as their mantra. Tomorrow could bring anything, afterall, but no matter what one experienced the days or weeks prior there's always that promise of waking up with a fresh perspective and shrugging the struggles off and to stay focused on what and who are truly important. Very uplifting read, thank you for sharing :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Tomorrow " by LOKI

"Hopefully not a dying breed these days. I like that you admire both the strengths and weaknesses of such a package deal. Humans in general could spend more time with humans in general. Nicely done :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Brave Men! ! ! ! " by M Morgan

"So much to unpack from such a small number of lines. Intriguing. I can't tell if that last line is haunting or hopeful and it makes me wonder who I would be coming out of the other side. Nicely done :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Devil's Math" by dark_sister

"This is something I think many of us can relate to. That self inflicted trap where you're treading water with a cinder block over your head while all of your problems and stresses gather around you and you never think to just drop that cinder block and swim back to shore, even when it's the most obvious solution. Fuck going through the maze, grab a chainsaw and carve your own path. Thanks for sharing :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "GlaZed!" by Black_Cherry_Doll_

"It's amazing how tormented we can become and how unable to move or act,sometimes even after a great deal of time has passed. Your word choice, I felt, did a great job of not only visually presented your idea but also of allowing the reader to feel the physical sensations associated with it. Not always easy to pull off. Write on! :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Dragonfly Pin Pricks" by AnotherWitheredRose

"I liked that you were able to take a well known story and shape it into something unique here. The idea that the individual turned to stone perhaps found themselves in this situation out of an attempt to free with love rather than by having been seeking glory or a weapon. I'm not sure what the structure of the contest this was originally submitted for was and that has me curious. Either way, nicely done :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Medusa (contest entry)" by dumbone

"This was a really interesting piece to read. I get the sense that someone tried so hard to pull someone out of their own self-inflicted, self-insisted disaster and despite those efforts it was blown along with the breeze, carefree but stuck to themselves, leaving those in their wake sad and exhausted. Interesting read, nicely done :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Wonders of" by Jonas Robinson

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