Comments by All Members
- "If you wanna know the truth, i only went with the 7/9/5 because of the first stanza. I came up with that in an instant, and just went from there. I kinda dont like the 4th stanza. Doesnt hit me as hard. Idk. I'll play with it some. Always a pleasure:)"
Posted by Ladyhawke on "Sleeping Willow" by Ladyhawke
- "Depends what you're going for. I've been told that an even number of syllables per line sounds more organic / folksy / rhythmic than an odd number of syllables (i.e your 7/9/5 scheme) which is often more pensive. It's good, and I enjoyed it, but it's hard to know what to suggest to you without knowing what you don't like about it specifically... Anyways, good work again *tips hat*"
Posted by Fantecstasy on "Sleeping Willow" by Ladyhawke
- "Wow, your writings are beautiful. You take us through your wonderland, and never miss a beat. You are really good. I want more, my dark princess"
Posted by Unknown on "Sleeping Willow" by Ladyhawke
- "The flow of this piece runs like liquid with the highest viscosity possible. Also, the sensuality adds a really nice...echo. Its great!"
Posted by Unknown on "Sleeping Willow" by Ladyhawke
- "I thought that this was quite exquisite. It had a balance of light and darkness and of the awake and the weary. And don't get me started on the adjectives Ms. Lady."
Posted by Unknown on "Midnight Eyes" by Ladyhawke
- "When we think of times past it's usually when the skies are dark, or it's raining. We each live from day to day trying to look forward to the new tomorrow. I enjoyed the poem and the flow
, An enjoyable read Thank you."
Posted by johnbevan17 on "Midnight Eyes" by Ladyhawke
- "Wonderful! Not only is the theme of the poem brilliant; which for me seemed of forgotten passion, finding something worth looking for... and I believe a reference to Sirens... But your use of words is epic! "Raindrops 'fore lain fallow".. gods thats good! And correct me if I'm at fault, but there seems to be almost a feeling of redemption eventually. Brilliant!"
Posted by Unknown on "Midnight Eyes" by Ladyhawke
- "" midnight hour is so contrare " True. When the day ends and the new day begins, this time is the time where my mind is in super-active state.. Seems same is with you! Lovely work!"
Posted by Unknown on "Midnight Eyes" by Ladyhawke
- "You maintained the flow even with 3 lines in a stanza! You kept me with you! Nice work! I like it! Sometimes I also feel the way you do. Defeated, all hope lost, not wishing to live any more. What can I do? MOVE ON!"
Posted by Unknown on "Masquerading Eden" by Ladyhawke
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