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- "An origin story like no other, perhaps the shell we leave behind is only half of the legacy. The impressions left on others may be the key to long sought eternal life. Fame diminishes, fortune decays, yet the people buried underneath such meaningless things are preserved. Personal makes perfect."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "The Dragon Carousel." by TheProphetUntold
- "A fitting foresight into the creation of what it is that you are, fire and brimstone correct? I think you captured the existence of yourself quite vividly (only from what I've heard and/or seen) I hope I'm not wrong in my critique because this has a very ancient and brooding feel to it, a story of an timeless birth, a limitless strength, and a horrendous ideology. I really dig this one."
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "The Dragon Carousel." by TheProphetUntold
- "Brilliance..The fact you wrote this from a personal perspective makes this all the more brilliant. On this evidence, you should keep writing from a personal aspect..Write on, Matt."
Posted by carlosjackal on "The Dragon Carousel." by TheProphetUntold
- "so many ways you work the metaphor of the Ulysses..... this siren's cry..... damn the insanity it instills under gasping skies.... awesome message..... there is a time for silence.... I can hear it on the horizon."
Posted by Unknown on "The Silence and the Shade." by TheProphetUntold
- "eternal night...... give birth to our sight.... and cloak us from theirs..... yep.... quite the oath....up in flames."
Posted by Unknown on "Dark Folk." by TheProphetUntold
- "seems like the alliterative verse really picked up heavily towards the end... I wondered if this had some kind of relation to the blind ... the blink and then the blind.... I like the concept of sinertia... but I wonder if the second half of the poem brings out the full suggestiveness of that neologism... as always, fierce in tone.... unforgiving in verse. *bows*"
Posted by Unknown on "Sinertia." by TheProphetUntold
- "the rhyme and medieval imagery, the stoic tone and force, all are beyond improvement... the carousel, I think, though woven into the fabric here, could be more symbolic.... I opine... the cosmic nature of it, the crib in the stars, perhaps, does bring an openness to it... but I'm not sure there is further development in the subsequent stanzas to create a greater force to the passing on of the carousel.... this could be read as longing for reproduction, a sense of immortality through bequeathing.... perhaps. the tone and images speak for themselves.... the judgment, the question of one's legacy weighs heavy in these words... *bows*"
Posted by Unknown on "The Dragon Carousel." by TheProphetUntold
- "Geeez! .... hell of a write! .... i agree with the others that say this is highly visual .... i like how you integrated the dragon carousel as a thread from start to finish .... Thanks for the view! "
Posted by Opklot on "The Dragon Carousel." by TheProphetUntold
- "Haunting familiarity & high adventure. You do that a lot. I dare any poet to step into your world & not be cut by your weighted s.words, sir. Another winner."
Posted by Unknown on "The Dragon Carousel." by TheProphetUntold
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