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Monochrome Moods
By Tania
She tore down the sky last night
And she took all of the stars with her
Gravity failed..
She dragged her nails through the horizon
And watched it slowly peel away..
Unconscious with her pulse racing
As the burning dusk
Turned a shade of grey..
She lived, slept and breathed
Life in Mono
And she woke in derelict dreams..
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© 2007 Tania
Published on Friday, April 20, 2007.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Monochrome Moods"
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On Saturday, July 21, 2007, jack paper
(126)
wrote:
this is wonderful write more! please
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On Saturday, July 21, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
haha.. im trying!!!thank you :)
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On Sunday, July 8, 2007, asphyxia
(58) wrote:
still friggen love that second line..
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On Wednesday, June 20, 2007, Bella Butchery
(724) wrote:
dittos six
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On Sunday, June 10, 2007, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
Ahh. I love the idea behind this. I could see a broken girl destroying the sky before my eyes. this was intoxicating.
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A former member wrote:
An existential goody. Nicely spoken.
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On Monday, May 21, 2007, Moonflower
(301) wrote:
so beautiful.
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On Thursday, May 17, 2007, Disassembly Boy
(61) wrote:
I have to comment this again, because I was reading it tonight..and JESUS.. it's so perfect.. "she woke in derelict dreams" rawr! can I kiss you?
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On Thursday, May 17, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
ahaha.. lol i just saw this now.. OF COURSE U CAN! (but you already know that dont u) ;)
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On Monday, May 7, 2007, BeautifullyRuined
(94) wrote:
This was Beautiful darling.
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On Tuesday, May 1, 2007, asphyxia
(58) wrote:
Thank you for the nice welcome Tania. Did I really come off all "getting" ? I didn't mean to! I was just explaining. I love this, had me from the second line.
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On Friday, April 27, 2007, jack paper
(126) wrote:
stark and edgy - reminds me of a few nights i've had... more please!
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A former member wrote:
'she dragged her nails through the horizon And watched it slowly peel away' -I felt that somehow. This is absolutely wonderful. Congrats.
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On Monday, April 23, 2007, carlosjackal
(3016) wrote:
Powerful, brilliant wordage..."And she woke in derelict dreams" Sublime stuff and a super last line. Love it!! -Carl
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On Monday, April 23, 2007, Disassembly Boy
(61) wrote:
imagery was amazing.. beautiful.. stunning.. I especially enjoyed the first stanza..but I loved the whole thing really. :) can't wait for more. cheers.
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On Monday, April 23, 2007, Disassembly Boy
(61) wrote:
Of course it took me forever to comment this.. as usual. I apologize.. You're always so kind to comment mine..and I really appreciate that.. how've you been? long time no talk on myspace.. anways, back to the purpose.. I loved every word of this.. the ima
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On Monday, April 23, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
Keeevinnnnnnnnnnn :)
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On Friday, April 20, 2007, disc
(36) wrote:
This made me think of someone tearing fingernails through a fresh oil painting. Well done.
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On Friday, April 20, 2007, Winter Born
(169) wrote:
awoke in derelict dreams... Gods! I have felt like this before! great write. short and to the point. I like that.
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On Friday, April 20, 2007, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
I can see it....
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On Friday, April 20, 2007, prettydisgrace
(96) wrote:
love the imagery Tania...loved the use or words too. gravity failed..x
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A former member wrote:
very cool. everything's perfect
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A former member wrote:
this was very beautiful...and i love the word momochrome. good job ~Tamara
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A former member wrote:
short and stunning, caught my breathe easily with each word. Magnificent!-Jigg Saw "Ken"
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A former member wrote:
this was superb! rich with imagery and ripe with emotion.I could hear the sky being ripped wide open. "life in mono"...made me think of the song.this was what I've been craving.thanks hon! ~Meg
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A former member wrote:
wow...I've often imagined tearing down the sky...the imagery in this is sooo very beautiful. It's beyond any term of awe or enchanted wonder I could think to type here. Excellent. Just...excellent. ~*Beth*~
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A former member wrote:
This was great, I really enjoyed this.
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