To Clutch Fireflies.You're Inside Me
By Mylissa
I wrote poems across the silver of
your tombstone. knowing your
bones were beneath my knees. trying to
recreate- how I lov{ed} thee- with the initials of {R.I.P}.
And I tasted dead rose petals
to feel you digest inside me.
Quilting love letters across
the length of your grave.
praying to God ‘please’ let it rain.
dissolve the sound of tears to the soil of
this earth, and sing sweet lullabies
inside the demise of skeletal ears.
And I struggled for some sort of sign.
clutching fireflies under the moon for some
sense of light. as the wind caught my cries in the palm
of his hands. I searched for an opening of mud and sand.
I was digging as if living
through a dream, reality was lost.
or so it seems. and I will devour the
ground just to set you free.
Because when you died -
you somehow forgot to take me.
Comments on "To Clutch Fireflies.You're Inside Me"
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On Friday, April 12, 2013, Salty Ships
(31) wrote:
Absolutely heartbreaking. The smooth flow of the piece lent it an air of easiness even as the intent of the words fell heavy. Thanks.
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On Wednesday, July 1, 2009, surething
(51) wrote:
the whole imagery of digesting rose pedals and devouring the earth, so satisfying an image for anyone who has expericed loss, well done, truly stunning work
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On Monday, August 11, 2008, Circe Avalon
(115) wrote:
Beautiful, very inspiring. this really demonstrates abandonment well. you did a great job and I love it.
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A former member wrote:
exquisite. pretty imagery; i liked the third stanza the best. it has such a soft melancholy touch that i love. keep writing x
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On Tuesday, July 24, 2007, jack paper
(126) wrote:
beautiful and crushing, brings tears to my eyes
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On Thursday, June 28, 2007, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
cohesively delicious
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A former member wrote:
''i searched... mud and sand'' This was wrenching. the title is packed with images as well.
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On Monday, May 14, 2007, Mistress Shadow
(252) wrote:
I have nothing intelligent to say other then I loved this. ~T
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On Thursday, March 15, 2007, blue
(1454) wrote:
~b yup.
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On Friday, February 23, 2007, Dark Nymph
(25) wrote:
You write with such emotion as well (Probably way before I ever did)! Very touching.
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On Thursday, February 22, 2007, Armor for your life
(9) wrote:
"I will devour the ground just to set you free" That is amazing, this poem hits all the right places. Excellent job
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On Tuesday, February 20, 2007, ThirdAuthor
(9) wrote:
Your Profile says "Don't fall in love with me, because I leap". ..You must do alot of leaping.
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A former member wrote:
intense, so sadening. Love your style
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A former member wrote:
a mournful, beautiful write. clutched the fireflies, held them in sorrowed hands & released them to the night sky.
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On Monday, February 19, 2007, Lynaes
(859) wrote:
Bethany is right, everytime I read you.. I am increasingly stunned. You're blossoming beautifully as a writer. "Quilting love letters across the length of your grave." gorgeous line. I love this.
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A former member wrote:
your poems keep on getting more and more beautiful..
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On Saturday, February 17, 2007, Tonights Decision
(137) wrote:
"to clutch Fireflies."..... how well you capture these feelings, frome start to finish. truly felt..
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On Saturday, February 17, 2007, carlosjackal
(3010) wrote:
"you somehow forgot to take me." The killer of all killer last lines and the end to a stunner of a poem, beautiful flow, beautiful language...your development since joining DP has been astounding :)
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On Saturday, February 17, 2007, blue
(1454) wrote:
~b
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A former member wrote:
just...damn. I had to take a step back at that last line. The poem is a play in itself. I can't find the words...awesome. Favorites. -END
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A former member wrote:
Oh God this was devastating, yet so beautiful. It melted my heart.
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A former member wrote:
this was beautiful. sad. full of heart ache. nicely done. ~ red.
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A former member wrote:
spectacular tribute.
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, soul dancer
(96) wrote:
So sad, another beautiful write.
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, zanewill
(84) wrote:
i can totaly relate...>>>>>>> write on!!
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, Sin
(1168) wrote:
...ive felt this, done this...i have no words to comment *leaves tears as tributes*
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, verablue
(111) wrote:
wow....i'm speachless. that ending was just perfect.
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
"the wind caught my cries in the palm of his hands", I know that feeling...that line describes it so well... Ciao, T/S
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, blue
(1454) wrote:
If this was indeed written from experience, then I am sorry to share this ever present pain with you. Blessed be. ~b
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, LOKI
(164) wrote:
This is tragically beautiful Mylissa.I almost wanted to cry after reading it.You are an amazing soul.Muaahhz
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On Friday, February 16, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
Beautiful write mylissa.. ~ i was just about to comment on your last then it vanished? oh well ~ x
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A former member wrote:
Oh, longing for a lost love. This was purely beautiful.