whores in the night (rewritten and retitled)

By alaskanamber

Really feel like a major bitch tonight
haven't taken a hit or a shot in awhile
slowly I'm coming around to the real world
as the drug induced haze lifts from my eyes
lust and desire increasing tenfold
tonight I clean my house
thinking naughty thoughts of you

before you accused of being horny
accepting my coursing riptide of lust
really I just want to rip off your clothes
age used to be a big deal, always on my mind
I'll apologize to your parents tomorrow
tonight you're my plaything, I'm your toy

you bring the handcuffs and I'll bring the blindfold
chocolate and strawberries for my insatiable greed
they will sustain you through the hours I disappear
once we dreamed in happily-ever-after land
bitterness has overtaken, tonight only you
me kneeling before you, that look in my eyes

can you handle me my friend
this arrangement benefiting the both of us
so many terms can apply, yet remain unspoken
in the end, we're all whores in the night
make me scream baby, make me cry
by morning I'll caress that smile back on your face

you call me high maintenance
the ring of truth, if you ever cared
the distance of my emotions a canyon uncrossed
physically I ring your body dry
insatiable fuels to stoke my fires
banked in the morning, waiting for another night

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© 2007 alaskanamber
Published on Monday, February 5, 2007.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Saturday, February 10, 2007, carlosjackal (3016)By person wrote:

    I really like this version..seems a lot tighter than the original although there was nothing wrong with it..Great stuff!

  • A former member wrote: I think it is. It still fucking rocks just as before though. -Marlena

  • alaskanamber On Monday, February 5, 2007, alaskanamber (64)By person wrote:

    I felt the first version of this was just not quite right. I've rewritten about half of it and am interested to see if my critics (you know who you are) think it's an improvement

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