a model on a billboard
By Jonas
she looked like fried chicken still wearing its feathers
like a twinkle to what will be a father's eye
somewhere someone's belly rumbles for white meat
ground down and reconstituted into shapes we've been taught to call
nuggets
she looks like a she has a secret but
the bird don't know no better
and neither do we
oncoming day we'll travel north
looking for better weather
as the south falls into the sea
harry and jim were brothers
owners of an art store
and jim supposed that he and harry had at least twenty good years left
in them
but he was a little apprehensive as to what those years may bring
when even now a half-million paper dollars can't even get you a bit of
window space on the mid-town strip
and dictators take pictures with pink babies
that are coming into the world they saw put together
from the fields of the one-sided war
the windmill that took it out of the kids of the sixties
they kiss their children goodnight
and in their sweetest dreams
their good nurture
will have theirs
grow
to
be
The Great Architects of
a new free world
and everyone is so sure god has gone missing
and the song on his lips is silence is
beautiful
and we dig in the dirt like kids looking for china
and anytime something shines in the mud we're convinced
that it's meaningful
and i feel like i never realized it was all a joke and no matter how much
you dig you're never going to get to asia
and when i'm old i'll drink tea in the west humming the songs of the east
and someone younger will wonder about the motion of a young girl's body
were the picture to break its static moorings and
become a part of the world
Awards
Comments on "a model on a billboard"
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A former member wrote:
It makes me want to giggle like a small girl gaining ancient knowledge, wow.
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On Monday, December 11, 2006, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
"we dig in the dirt..." I was digging in the DP dirt and found this, something shiny and meaningful. S.
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A former member wrote:
"and everyone is so sure god has gone missing" This is a very well crafted poem; i like the mood & motion, the rhythm; the observance of ideas; the structure. The black comedy inside. "and we dig in the dirt like kids looking for china." Nice!
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A former member wrote:
this was fabulous. i especially loved how the first line sort of pulled me in.."and we dig in the dirt like kids looking for china and anytime something shines in the mud we're convinced that it's meaningful" purely outstanding.
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A former member wrote:
you know i love your writings. this is mostly a response, dear friend. things are good. better, even. ;)
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A former member wrote:
"and everything is so sure god has gone missing" So many wonderful lines here; that one sticks out the most in my mind. Excellent imagery...wonderfully woven work. ~*Beth*~
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On Friday, October 20, 2006, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
You have done it again, great piece! I especially liked the imagery of "we dig in the dirt like kids looking for china and anytime something shines in the mud we're convinced that it's meaningful". Ciao, T/S
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On Friday, October 20, 2006, hate_doll
(265) wrote:
you have a serpentine mind that is forever tempting
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On Thursday, October 19, 2006, blue
(1454) wrote:
=) that was great! ~b
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A former member wrote:
Fried chicken still wearing their feathers. Where the hell did that come from, That is some crazy stuff.
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On Thursday, October 19, 2006, Carmina Gitana
(149) wrote:
The first line was what struck me and kept me reading till the end, but I loved this entire twisting journey through reality to illusion and back again. I like the structure, so seemingly random, yet controlled. Great work, thank you.