a man of me

By Jonas

i like to keep control of the who what when where how
i am a big fan of incidental meetings and activities
i hide behind spontenaity trying to conceal the fact that my desires are the desires of a coward

if i like to dance around the obvious with words that are fading fast
and if i erase another line for some forgotten piece of the past
that doesn't fit into this song
then who'll be there to blame me
and when my fear of nuclear tragedy comes to its own
my aims reach a reasonable zenith
and the god of war comes into the plane of visible
borne on the strecher that carried the pieces of venus

i can't remember which piece of the story fits into the web of the reasons i give
though no one has ever even thought to wonder i imagine the scrutiny
flesh under synthetic fibres
it helps me to see past everthing on a pedestal of self-assured enmity

and if i like to run from the words for a day or two
and come back to where i was with something more
who would know and who are you to have anything to say about that
then the chemicals mix together and fool neurons into thinking
that energy is forming lesions on my peace of mind
and everything i've done is worthless
and saying so is simply fishing for compliments

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© 2006 Jonas
Published on Tuesday, July 25, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • urbanhumility On Tuesday, August 8, 2006, urbanhumility (1175)By person wrote:

    this is the formula to you, your explanation is what i have sought..and you have given it freely...the mark of a gentle-man..and remember a "fish" can never fish for complements...they are simply given..

  • urbanhumility On Tuesday, August 8, 2006, urbanhumility (1175)By person wrote:

    given out of awe of you....and your words...........well done......pescado.............urban

  • Jaded Jezzabelle On Sunday, August 6, 2006, Jaded Jezzabelle (328)By person wrote:

    I felt this so deep jonas it was almost like I new what the next line would read before I even got to it....THE TRUTH IS HARD TO SWALLOW SOMETIMES...but anything less leaves me hungry...this filled me up!!!

  • TaintedButterfly On Wednesday, July 26, 2006, TaintedButterfly (670)By person wrote:

    I agree tenfold!!!! This struck me in a way, I wish I couldn't relate to. Marvelous. If you're fishing, you have damn good bait! Julia~

  • purr_verse On Wednesday, July 26, 2006, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    And..."Hey! Why isn't the 'continue comment' thingo working? Raargh."

  • purr_verse On Wednesday, July 26, 2006, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    (alliteration not planned. Huh. Odd) Fantastic look in and through the mirror; feels like genius.

  • purr_verse On Wednesday, July 26, 2006, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    (warning: dodgy pun approaching, tenuously related to last line) I'll bite. ... Intensely internal, insightful and intelligent. (

  • BroKen-GlaSSHeArT On Tuesday, July 25, 2006, BroKen-GlaSSHeArT (69)By person wrote:

    wow, your words are playful and simply amazing^^you deserve much praise

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, July 25, 2006, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    haha. So many will comment without even understanding, and just say this is great. I still say you're a fag, and you owe me a reach around. adios, bitch. mucholoveo

  • Thorn On Tuesday, July 25, 2006, Thorn (283)By person wrote:

    This is absolutely epic. I loved the way your words played with my mind...

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