Hidden From This World
By Adam
Hidden from this world
I’m frustrated I can’t be with
the person I love
This jealousy I feel is tight around me
like a glove
Tighter and tighter it comes till I have no
more room for other desires
The more hope I find, the more
I want to become like a crier
The louder I tell, the more
vulnerable I become the more vulnerable I become the more fear I find
My fear is surrounded by envy and loneliness that can’t
even be filled by praying to the divine
If this person finds
out about this loneliness and pain
It will be like being
stuck in the rain
The embarrassment and helplessness I’ll
discover
I just hope these feelings never get uncovered.
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Copyright 2005 aldldl1989
Author's Note:
vaultgrl (member 10000)Comments on "Hidden From This World"
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A former member wrote:
I read this and then read it again. I can absolutely relate to this feeling. Repressing your feelings to the point of madness is all too familiar. Excellent write.
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On Monday, November 24, 2014, PentaGram
(27) wrote:
Awesome write thank you for sharing, we all have felt this kind of love and you described it quite amazing.
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A former member wrote:
I know how this feels all to well. Great write!
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On Thursday, November 23, 2006, CorruptedLittleGirl
(253) wrote:
I can relate to this one as well. Just try not to let your emotions totally govern your life. You deserve more.
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A former member wrote:
"Tighter and tighter it comes till I have no more room for other desires " I like that line ALOT...Great writes
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On Wednesday, February 22, 2006, Adam
(245) wrote:
Thanks!
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On Sunday, January 1, 2006, Darkest_Addiction
(44) wrote:
"This jealousy I feel is tight around me like a glove" i just love this line i know this feeling a little to well
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On Thursday, December 29, 2005, Forgotten Angel
(310) wrote:
i could've sworn i commented on this..but i didnt. so..damn adam..you've captured my feelings exactly..theres somebody i like, that i wouldnt have a chance with..and..this just..amazes me, cuz i could never write anything as good as this...-Kel
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On Sunday, November 6, 2005, sIo
(926) wrote:
My fear is surrounded by envy and loneliness that can’t even be filled by praying to the divine < that line is fucking beautiful.
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On Wednesday, November 30, 2005, Adam
(245) wrote:
Being told I [one of my woks] am beautiful by one of the best and most beautiful poets on the site is humbling and I am very thankful thanks so much sIo
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On Thursday, November 3, 2005, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
stuck in the rain or maybe better stuck out in the rain, feeling the nakedness of your emotions, i like the rareness of your emotion, use it in more of your writes
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A former member wrote:
I am not sure if this is your best (that I will find out when I read more of your work) but for now it is #1
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On Thursday, October 20, 2005, Adam
(245) wrote:
thanks. let me know
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On Friday, September 16, 2005, serotonin lost
(145) wrote:
poem isn't about the rhyme's but you definatly nailed them in this, it flows, rhymes, has meaning and emotion. by all standards an excellant piece.
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On Monday, September 12, 2005, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
that was great adam, I can relate totally...
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On Monday, September 12, 2005, Adam
(245) wrote:
This my best in terms of poems I think. feed back is welcome.