fourty-two ashes

By Six-Out

4am [beachhouse] blanketed under over-indulgence
and the waves mute our .screams

back: before our dreams had begun to _crack
singing backup to the night. with a bottle of wine
just a glance at our ocean- a parade of stars. dancing in harmony
wind on your face. and your toes buried in sand
we could almost [taste] .forever.

in the water- as we lost track of tomorrow.
I could see a burning passion/ in your eyes. this.is.freedom
_a toast to 'nights to remember'

on our backs- plucking stars from the sky
with a broken bottle between us. we talked about what was
-laughed at yesteryear, and at this moment
I could feel.

your arms and my neck. a perfect set- it would seem
as we slept under a star-crossed tomorrow
and begged the sun. not to rise

that .
was perfection

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Published on Wednesday, December 8, 2004. Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"

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A former member wrote: your poetic skills are flawless. ][ ][
On Tuesday, April 25, 2006, Kinkypoptart (555) wrote:

Beautiful... so much passion put into this write... I can clearly see how you're royalty. Great write ~*~tart~*~
On Saturday, February 19, 2005, Carmina Gitana (149) wrote:

So languid and sensuous. I know moments like these and love them - great job at capturing it.
A former member wrote: This had such a nostalgic feel to it and captured a small moment in time in the most beautifully simplistic way possible. Absolutely awsome man. ~Ryan
On Sunday, December 12, 2004, sIo (898) wrote:

your poetry will always make me want to cry.
On Thursday, December 9, 2004, slow.burn.star (84) wrote:

you should write emo songs
On Sunday, December 19, 2004, Twilight (1782) wrote:

i was thinking the same exact thing...heh
On Thursday, December 9, 2004, slow.burn.star (84) wrote:

density rising like fumes from a smokey stomach. .depth.deeper.sober-
On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428) wrote:

--so many lines that just fit. perfectly arranged and written. "your arms and my neck. a perfect set- it would seem as we slept under a star-crossed tomorrow and begged the sun. not to rise". . . *bows*, amazing
On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428) wrote:

once again, you are on my faves list. wow. . .this was absolutely beautiful. damn, you've really made me fall in love with your words with this one. it's so perfect. . so right. I dunno, it all just kinda clicked for me in my head if that makes sense. so
A former member wrote: i loved this one beautifully done.
A former member wrote: absolutely beautiful and amazing write!
A former member wrote: Yet again, you have contrived a wonderful poem. "- a parade of stars dancing in harmony" . . you have this gift which is just so effortless . . a gift which astounds me. So beautiful, Jon. ~ Rose
On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, Solace (1065) wrote:

The fleeting indulgence befor the dreary, tiresome waves crash over you...it is those moments, those slivers that keep us here...
On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, Rachel (210) wrote:

I can see this happening. It plays out like a movie in my mind.. It's beautiful, Jon. Absolutely beautiful.
On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, Lotophagi (333) wrote:

"on our backs- plucking stars from the sky with a broken bottle between us. we talked about what was" reflective, introspective and yearning.... excellent write Jon. Thank you.