August 9th

By ONEANDLONELY

Pen approaching paper,
Totally obscured by light,
My hand pulled away,
I cocked my head,
Stared out into the night.
The thought,
What ultimately shaped my future,
Is helpless in the past.
Locked tight in my heart,
Ages apart,
No soul will ever pass.

Young man dreams grow colder,
Foretold pain has begun.
The cancer grows,
While lifeblood flows,
His world becomes undone.

Out from my still fingers,
Pen falls to the wooden floor.
Exhaling out breath,
I feel it's weight,
As was is never more.

I thought,
The one gift that had been given,
Aborted from my womb.
Hoarded by the lord,
In just accord,
Taken away too soon.

Young man blames the elder,
The wise man has passed away.
Stand alone,
Watch time unfold,
He bleeds heartfelt betray.

Taste of ale on my lips,
One small drop unnoticed fell,
Replacing the tear,
That fell in fear,
On words not meant to sell.

I heard,
A love once known,will never die,
It becomes love re-born.
In some strangers eyes,
Brief time it buys,
Beneath this smile I mourn.

Young man dreams aren't over,
Cast your glare not at the son,
Don't blame the game,
All stays the same,
"He and you are still one."

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Copyright 2004 ONEANDLONELY
Published on Wednesday, March 17, 2004.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • LovelyAssassinx On Thursday, August 4, 2005, LovelyAssassinx (151)By person wrote:

    Extremely well written. The flow was excellent. Wonderful write. ~Sara

  • AHHH On Sunday, September 12, 2004, AHHH (187)By person wrote:

    nice write

  • A former member wrote: i love it i feel the emotion flowing great write ~Ends

  • A former member wrote: The best poems tell the truth, even when the truth hurts like hell. This one does both. ~Shane~

  • Soulseeker On Friday, July 30, 2004, Soulseeker (108)By person wrote:

    *Cast your glare not at the son* This captured me.... WONDERFUL write with a lot of thought. Bethany

  • A former member wrote: awsome write, can feel hurt.

  • Griffin On Sunday, June 6, 2004, Griffin (114)By person wrote:

    descritive, i really liked it

  • Cwn Annwn On Wednesday, April 14, 2004, Cwn Annwn (91)By person wrote:

    WOW. Your thoughts are so descriptive...I loved it. Wonderful write!~GoNe~

  • Mistress Morbid On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405)By person wrote:

    Well done... -Morb

  • ONEANDLONELY On Thursday, April 1, 2004, ONEANDLONELY (117)By person wrote:

    Thank you all for your comments. It feels good to be read. Thank you also for taking the time to tell me your thoughts. ONEANDLONELY

  • Mistress Morbid On Wednesday, April 7, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405)By person wrote:

    Your very much welcome. This one I actually enjoyed reading.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    Yes, the meter was very effective - so many rhyming pieces can easily devolve into sing-songy disasters. This was very well done - I love the lines "Young man blames the elder, The wise man has passed away". Look forward to reading more. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • A former member wrote: I love the way it flows and how youre descriptive. Karla Scholar

  • flying_fox On Thursday, March 18, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    Terrific meter... it has a kind of old fashioned feel. I like it! Fox

  • hate_doll On Wednesday, March 17, 2004, hate_doll (265)By person wrote:

    oh, excellent flow...this painted a perfect picture in my mind. A lot of good lines, and also a lot of truths told in this piece. brava

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