Sober Up

By maddin foxxxy

I follow the
lines
of my pen
as I write

I don't know
where it's
going to...
where i'm
going to crash into...

Your finger
I do see it
pointing back
at me

Your eyes
they weigh
like bricks
all over me

I don't follow the
way
for me to think
about every single
word
that slips through

My guilt just
carries on.......
My innocence
always seems
to die
And it's not meant for me
to know the reason why
it's not meant for me
to excuse the words to live by

I write
as I crawl
I live...

As I breath
I think
And pour in
alcohol
to the thoughts
until they
drink up enough
to pass out
on the bed
outside
of my head


What I wouldn't
give for someone else
to hold this pen and write

What I wouldn't
lose for someone else
to trade another page with me
And sober up...
sober up
my thoughts.

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Copyright 2003 maddin foxxxy
Published on Thursday, November 27, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: This would make an incredible song.

  • A former member wrote: "Your eyes they weigh like bricks all over me" Here's my pen, here are my pages... let me draw words for you; then, perhaps, you'll compose some back for me. time for a drink, as i crawl

  • Drea On Friday, November 28, 2003, Drea (1443)By person wrote:

    "What I wouldn't give for someone else to hold this pen and write" *sits in awe* ~Drea~

  • A Velvet Tongue On Thursday, November 27, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436)By person wrote:

    wow darling, this write...it is one of your bests, so deep, so raw, so...honest....I love it...

  • OLd SouL On Thursday, November 27, 2003, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    the verse that starts off as As I breathe, really grabs me. I typically do drown my thoughts until they are outside of me or at least I try. Great write again hun. *hugs* OLd

  • xX pretty vacant Xx On Thursday, November 27, 2003, xX pretty vacant Xx (64)By person wrote:

    great poem. "I don't know where it's going to... where i'm going to crash into..." made me feel kinda dizzy. i like the feeling that comes across.

  • Lost_Soul On Thursday, November 27, 2003, Lost_Soul (34)By person wrote:

    I like this. The funny thing is that I'm drunk right now. Really, really drunk. But even when I'm sober, I'll still think this is a good write

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