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Eyes Open
By maddin foxxxy
While you were sleeping
I got to arrange the room
into some brighter zoom
of light...
At the other side
of the glassed window
there is a moon...
In between the
silence
there is a communication
more understood
than words.
And as you slept
I got to tell you
I was afraid of
what would happen next
when you opened your eyes
and the world was real again.
But your face
stood there in a peaceful
state...
You appear more brave
this way.
I am unseen
As you sleep...
Visible perchance
inside
one of the dreams
rushing
through your mind.
I can only guess
the image you have
of me right now....
Because what I see
staring back at me
is a boy
and a man
when caught up in my arms.
And I can't get to
truly close my eyes
so fully...
While you are sleeping
there is your own beauty
shining before me
there is your own beauty
you never get to see.
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Copyright 2003 maddin foxxxy
Published on Thursday, November 13, 2003.
Filed under:
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Comments on "Eyes Open"
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A former member wrote:
"shining before me
there is your own beauty
you never get to see." this is so soft and beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
"At the other side
of the glassed window
there is a moon" this is absolutely beautiful; your words moved and stirred my soul, gracefully, like butterfly wings...
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A former member wrote:
foxxxy, you opened my eyes wide shut to this beautiful composition; wide shut as I can see the imagery behind my closed eyes, "Visible perchance
inside..."
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, urbanhumility
(1175)
wrote:
most beautiful, not only in your word, but more even in your kindness.....well spoken my friend.......urban
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
Absolutely beautiful, S
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
I really like the title to this piece. There is much depth to this theme that will have to go unexplained in this comment. It's the beauty of complete helplessness in slumber. Nice write again.
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On Thursday, November 13, 2003, Boii
(2) wrote:
Nice, i love the second stanza especially.
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A former member wrote:
envy, not enough to say how i wish that this was one of my own thoughts
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On Thursday, November 13, 2003, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
you amaze me yet again. the beauty you captured in a slumbered soul was enchanting. a pleasure to read. :::OLd
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A former member wrote:
it's the kind that makes escaping here
worth the while...charmed
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