Promises to the Moon

By God Is In The Rain

Promises to the Moon

Broken shellfish lost inland.
She's as fish as squid -
as wet as sand.
Dreaming about rocky coasts.
Full of ifs, whys and almost.
Watching black ink swallow shore,
the lady from flat five one four.
Alas, she made promise to the moon;
To place a sugar cube,
on a living dune.
And so as rouge gets washed away,
at least tonight -
the beach is safe.

Caught in thousand aspen eyes,
their gentle whispers,
gentle sighs.
Tired of running from the wind.
Tossed and turned, yet stuck and pinned.
Laying under tall birch tree,
chap from lane nine four one three.
Alas,  he made promise to the moon;
To watch upcoming season,
of "pururin" cartoon.
And so rope laying by the door,
will hang in there -
furthermore.

Followed by undying light,
just below,
just out of sight.
Waiting to be saved by day,
just to come, yet far away.
I'm sending letters as a chore,
with postal five three five four.
But, alas -
I made a promise to the moon...





Authors note: sorry if its a tad too cringy, the ideas put in sounded great on their own; I at least tried to break it apart a bit so it wouldnt be yet another 8-syllabel poem, which felt perhaps most cringe inducing given the topic. If you have advice how to fix the cringy parts please do let me know.

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Copyright 2021 God Is In The Rain
Published on Sunday, April 25, 2021.     Filed under: "Depressed" and "Poetry"
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  • TropicalSnowstorm On Thursday, April 15, 2021, TropicalSnowstorm (1765)By person wrote:

    I think it works if you end it after "furthermore." Either that, or you need thirteen lines in that last part or it seems out of balance and what is there seems too in earnest to tie things up. I think you can just leave it hanging and it works fine. The only two lines that I don't think really worked were "To watch upcoming season, of "pururin" cartoon." Other than that, I think all the lines are witty and filled with excellent imagery. Ciao, T/S Scholar

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