Enmeshed In Darkness (Purp's greatest hits)
By Purposelessness
Burn in hell our mothers cry,
As we stand in the cold and shiver
You're not mine our fathers lie,
As the rain beats out a quiver
I am the mammoth and the flea
I am the spider and the fly
I am the death in your eye,
As you are in mine
I see the sun, but my heart won't mend
I've seen my end, my almost friend
All my pain is all of yours,
All your wounds are all my sores
We repeat our lives and days and death,
Ever here with one more breath
I see myself in all these dreams,
Drowned again in shallow streams
But I'll never be reborn like you
Never evergreen, nor grown anew
Stanza 1: King Lizard, The Folly of Faith
Stanza 2: Purposelessness, A Bitter Release
Stanza 3: Human Again, The End
Stanza 4: Ever Here, "."(Haiku), Evergreen
Author's Note:
*This is a meld of some of my previous material, nailed together into a new story, in submission to 10 forty three's competition*Comments on "Enmeshed In Darkness (Purp's greatest hits)"
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On Friday, January 31, 2020, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
Looking back at this, I wonder if I should have put stanza 3 first.
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On Saturday, February 1, 2020, Amaryllis
(1147) wrote:
I say no because that first stanza is a call to arms and the rest flows perfectly to make this whole piece stand tall and sure amidst the pain. My opinion is it's already perfect.
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On Sunday, February 23, 2020, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
Thanks for your comment and advice, it means a lot especially from you!
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On Monday, March 18, 2019, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
Thanks guys!!!
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On Tuesday, March 12, 2019, 10 Forty Three
(593) wrote:
This has an AMAZING flow and also, you did a great job with combining your poems to make it sound like one. Well done! - 10
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On Tuesday, March 12, 2019, I IS ME
(406) wrote:
Tight, freaking tight