When Guns Go Silent
By dwells
The Masses garish fashion,
atonement dressed in red.
The guillotine of justice
to history is wed.
Dispensing modern justice,
we fill the air with lead.
Avenge perceived transgressions
of what was done, or said.
Until with guns gone empty,
we oiled that blade of dread.
The guillotine of justice
still hungry for a head.
The patriots on trial
would share a traitor’s bed,
and all who dared defend them
were kindred with the dead.
All thumped into the basket,
their souls to somewhere, sped;
and each its own expression
was frozen as it bled.
The village square in terror,
all reason having fled;
the blade in thirsty silence,
impartial as it fed.
A/N: Even lines are iambic trimeter; while odd lines are trochaic trimeter,
ending in an anabrachic foot (^I^) eg. "transgressions"
Author's Note:
Going where the monorhyme leads me, cheers!Awards
Comments on "When Guns Go Silent"
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A former member wrote:
The bleak history of humanity told in a most graceful manner. There is much to think and ponder over this poem. Congrats for such a theme and construction.
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On Sunday, August 27, 2017, Mute Serenade
(445) wrote:
Hnnngggggggg the structure sings! Amazing. And the content razzle dazzles. First/last stanzas pack a magnificent punch! Hazaa hazaa hazaa :)
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On Sunday, May 7, 2017, molock
(314) wrote:
another great write, in all honesty I find myself questing textbook version of history but that's a whole other subject for another time. good to hear from ya with much love my brother - mo
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On Thursday, May 4, 2017, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
Very well done, man! That is an interesting and terrifying period of history...thank goodness our revolution had different end results. After leaving the US he helped fight to found, Lafayette was caught up in some of the intrigue and spent years in an Austrian prison after trying to flee the bloodletting. Your piece brought to my mind the scenes and smells and shouted jeers that drowned out pleas for justice. Great, great work! Ciao, T/S
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A former member wrote:
A great poem with impeccable rhyme dynamics!
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On Sunday, April 30, 2017, Jerry stiles
(251) wrote:
Great write dwells,,the blade is thirsty,,awsum work,,Jack the ripper had a lot of thirsty blades,,hahaaa,,
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On Saturday, April 29, 2017, dwells
(4288) wrote:
Many thanks for all your valued comments my friends: WW, KF, DD, and KB! You make it all worthwhile. Cheers! - Dan P.S. - there are many variations on the guillotine :)
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On Wednesday, April 26, 2017, darkendomme
(125) wrote:
Everything about this is brilliant !! Each word created for each excellent sentence and rhyme.. you even set the scene for your audience. It played in my mind like a movie. I'm in awe as always. Definite and great study guide for me. Inspiration crack!! ;) Thank you Sensei Dan.