Cumulonimbus

By Phalanx

My words from a face, unforgiving.

I'll last longer if you freeze me before I bleed out.
Might have to recount some wrong done right before I can form an audible thought
Where you'll salvage softer glass, hundreds of years from now when
I look cooler than trip hop and dub step.
They made some money, No Doubt.
When man lost it's mind was a gradual self persecution.
It tames through time,
That you become slower and more accepting
Like impossible is realistic.
There is no punctuation that can make that make sense.
Where gods die is when you stand up
With more than anyone else, to lose.
This is how you die right
Where the soul cries, freedom.
In our language, 'echo' means, 'thunder.'

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Copyright 2016 Phalanx
Published on Saturday, February 20, 2016.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Dilated View On Sunday, July 28, 2019, Dilated View (583)By person wrote:

    This really reeked of oppression. Has man currently lost their minds? Or is this an ongoing set of goal posts that move as needed? So much pressure in order to get to "freedom". And by some belief systems your "freedom" means heading back to a pool of energy only to be spit out again at some point in order to go through this process again. Cyclical infinity. Maybe man never lost it's mind, maybe it was programmed this way. Either way, again, the oppression feels real. Very interesting read, going from line to line I could physically feel the weight of it all pushing down on me and now I feel deflated. That, for me, is the mark of something excellent. Very cool :)

  • Phalanx On Sunday, April 25, 2021, Phalanx (679)By person wrote:

    Something about your word choice doesn't agree with me.

  • Drea On Sunday, February 21, 2016, Drea (1443)By person wrote:

    I agree with Nike, you can feel the frustration in this. I liked your word choices.

  • NikesRain On Sunday, February 21, 2016, NikesRain (1298)By person wrote:

    A though provoking work. Not something to skim lightly over and feel with token fingers... although not severe, the frustration in this is quite evident....nicely done


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