Lonely Days.

By CoffeeBreak

Wish you were here, or I was there,
'Cause right now I'm in despair,
I'm well aware that  you don't care,
Though no other could compare,
Its been years since things were clear,
Now I'm all but full of fears,
And when they near, the tears appear,
Leaving all this ink a smear.

Wish at times that I could fly,
Go and leave this all behind,
Escape my mind that's so unkind,
All these thoughts keep me confined,
So set me free, give back the key,
Lock my heart and take your leave,
'Fore I conceive a way to heave,
All these words so you can't breathe,
Your lips will hue into a blue,
Then maybe you'll feel as I do,
So overdo- I think you knew,
All too well how I've been strewn,
Left in pieces- no releases,
Time does not seem to ease this,
Sorrow seizing pain that squeezes-
Till all of this just deceases.

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Copyright 2013 CoffeeBreak
Published on Monday, August 5, 2013.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Third revision;
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  • tonebone On Friday, May 15, 2020, tonebone (53)By person wrote:

    Ahhh CoffeeBreak I love it! It starts out as a standard sentiment and your reading along loving the rhyme scheme and suddenly it takes a turn and im thinkinking maybe I don't want to stand to close to this guy but I cannot move and I'm absolutely willing to endure what might fly off this person cause i've got see how it ends. I'm not disappointed either. Your concise rhyme scheme and lyrical meter are easily followed and the ideology "(which is fuck you) definitely has found a home at D.P. tb.

  • RoseTheBrokenHearted On Saturday, April 16, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (131)By person wrote:

    Such a beautiful and captivating write. It happens to make me wonder if we are, perhaps, any different at all. The flow I got from reading it, made it seem, as if it were a song.

  • soul_versing On Monday, November 25, 2013, soul_versing (1098)By person wrote:

    Simply beautiful in every way... Oh, this made me sad and start reminiscing a bit; but at the same time, smile because I'm not alone in my feelings. Applauds this piece. Bows- Scholar

  • hazydaisy On Friday, November 8, 2013, hazydaisy (159)By person wrote:

    wish you were here, or wish i was there.

  • A former member wrote: A broken heart heals, a scorned mind too heals...everything heals with time. Don´t fuck up. Excellent work.

  • jerryrickard On Wednesday, August 14, 2013, jerryrickard (41)By person wrote:

    wow. This is quite good man, i totally relate. The rhyme scheme is great and the substance is amazing

  • Intoxicating Delirium On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium (395)By person wrote:

    Wow, I love the way you rhyme everything here, the flow is amazing.. I love this piece, great job. :)

  • vampire_queen666 On Monday, August 5, 2013, vampire_queen666 (142)By person wrote:

    The rhyme and rhythm scheme truly pushes the despair that flows within this poem. I love it. I can really relate to this, and feel every word in this write. Nice work

  • Deathkitten On Monday, August 5, 2013, Deathkitten (626)By person wrote:

    This is truly lonely. I know the feeling. Losing someone can often be the best thing for us. I think it happens for a reason. Nice write! Welcome to DP :)

  • blue angel On Monday, August 5, 2013, blue angel (1117)By person wrote:

    Deep emotions displayed in a beautiful rhyme, my heart clinches from this pain of a lost love ;)~ Nicely penned!!And welcome to dp ~^_^~

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