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If i Dance with an Empty Mind
By BetaWolfinVA
If i dance with an empty mind,
i may survive another night,
looking around in my dreams,
wishing for a hold on dreams...
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if i find a hold on hope,
should i let it free or cope
within this edge sharp place
between defeat and despair...
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if i wish too hard,
will i begin to feel,
the
desperation in my soul?
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or should i just coast some more
shooting my self in the foot as i go
dancing through this lunatics
hell
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fins
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Copyright Monday, 5 October, 1998 HHMCameron
Author's Note:
I think this must have been just after another one of raven's lifeline calls where i saved her life but put my sanity at risk.Comments on "If i Dance with an Empty Mind"
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A former member wrote:
I find a mind here burdened to distraction. Despair starting to creep in but still held at bay. A very descriptive opiece
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On Sunday, March 3, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(795)
wrote:
Thank you much, Glad that you enjoyed it :)
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A former member wrote:
this is awesome, i love the third stanza comparing hope and desperation
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On Friday, March 1, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(795) wrote:
that is quite literal... at the end of my first marriage, when i finally started to believe that i could be getting free soon i collapsed, took me a long time to work through that... but this poem was written much earlier (q.v. goddess of ravens) with raven i knew that every thing i hoped for, dreamed for, was wrong in the eyes of society and it was shattering to me... and being shattered by it (and avoiding her as society dictated, for as long as i could) is why she eventually left me... but she kept coming back, but after loving her and having to avoid her for so long, i was set in avoidance
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On Sunday, February 24, 2013, Iwas
(39) wrote:
I like this. should I even hope? It portrays such a dark despair so easily. well done friend. well done.
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On Sunday, February 24, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(795) wrote:
i actyually miss this time... i was her lifeline, and it was her contacting me... now, i am the one that contacts her... and i no longer mean as much to her...
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