tangled veins (blow away)

By King_Crazy_Dave

the wind is stretching limbs
of a yawning planet
breezes are
wriggling digits holding hands and
combing fieldmice
imprecise, free
pushing the sea

they span evermore everywhere,
wind wives wound around
secret blustery boyfriends,
leaves caught in the affair, proving
precise paths transparently
twirling

the wind is stretching limbs,
of a yawning planet
and if
breezes digits wriggle round eachother

let our breaths be the veins tangled
let distance fade
my inhale, your exhale
lets blow away.

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Published on Thursday, December 6, 2012. Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

miraculously salvaged from my deleted account hooray!

Comments on "tangled veins (blow away)"

A former member wrote: I've yet to be able to save any works from my account a whiles back. Anyways. I liked this. The subtle repetition made for a very well wrought piece.
A former member wrote: i fucking miss you, you piece of shit. i'm sorry i haven't written you. i suck, and there's way too much to say that i couldn't bear writing down and facing. i love you, brother. you write like a sorcerer with a really big wand and an overlarge sad heart.
On Monday, December 31, 2012, Poetic-Realm (258) wrote:

Magic.... pure magic. I like the little tongue twisters sent about as well. Fun to try and speed read aloud haha, good practice too! The metaphorical prowess gliding throughout this piece is definitely one to be sought after by those in need of am example on HOW TO create concrete and universal, yet unique and totally personal imagery for the reader. It seems to tap into both my conscious and subconscious in all the same strokes. Like a dream, like a memory, like a future hope, all tied together...
On Friday, December 14, 2012, Oliver Twisted (55) wrote:

this wonderful write brought to mind the animated scene from natural born killers, when mickey and mallory kiss their open wounds together. brilliant!
On Friday, December 7, 2012, FadedBlues (2169) wrote:

...spoken promises, like fallen leaves, can be carried away by the wind...
On Thursday, December 6, 2012, midnights voice (971) wrote:

Love the imagery of the wind....very original.
On Thursday, December 6, 2012, PoetessDarkly (700) wrote:

wow awesome imagery and flow. I love a poem that makes you stop and think!
On Thursday, December 6, 2012, dwells (4285) wrote:

Some unusual images and word grouping but you pulled it off very well as I'm sure you know. Does conjure up a feeling of love in the air (amongst other things) - cheers Dave!