The Invention of Goodbye

By Dei

I whimper truth
hoping you'll be an honest answer.
Though I never truly expected anything from you.
Excepting everything. Just everything. Just everything.
What I got in return were exhausted echoes. And I realized
Far, far too late that I was standing in this room alone.
Funny how the empty walls sound wiser with you gone.

... ... ...

Without your voice, I hear the clarity I rightfully deserve
No more distractions, no more fallacies of felicity
False as the teeth of the elderly and the inebriated
Related to your absence, I excel with unearthing my wisdom
The kind that leads me away from all your lies.

... ... ...

I guess this is my version of giving in/up. and breaking down.
I suppose what I thought was the Earth cracking
Was actually my spine shattering. But, even wilted upon the floor
I still ask that you wipe your feet before walking all over me
And slamming the door on my outstretched hand.

... ... ...

I demand respect, live and direct
Inspect the violence you committed with your neglect
Here I go, riding the rails of failure
Sailing across seas of solitude and serene sorrow
That will be the last time I leave
And the first time I breathe in the fumes of freedom.

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Published on Friday, November 9, 2012. Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Thank you Jack for exploring this with me.

Awards

December 10th, 2019

Comments on "The Invention of Goodbye"

On Tuesday, December 10, 2019, Humanfly (3) wrote:

it's so raw. Straight to the heart. i can feel it literally pouring out of a gaping hole in the heart. so so love it.
A former member wrote: "Funny how the empty walls feel wiser when you're gone." How melancholic and tragic, how sheer and ghostly unforgiving. There is too much here to say about my past, too much about anyone who could relate, so I will comment on the structure of the poem. It has great backbone and body. It is flitting and nightly, but there is purity here in the strength of words, memories, emotions re-lived. Re-loved. Deadly beautiful.
A former member wrote: I want to read the dismantling of hello.
On Sunday, February 17, 2013, Dei (665) wrote:

then let's write it!
On Tuesday, February 12, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (795) wrote:

wow, how did i not comment on this in november... loved it, and inspired me to write http://www.darkpoetry.com/node/work/170254... amazing what tricks you learn over time...
A former member wrote: wonderful poem :) I like most how the tone is dark but playful, and how it wraps up at the end with a powerful impact leaving the reader feeling satisfied. 10/10!
On Friday, November 30, 2012, Oliver Twisted (55) wrote:

this was a great write! you guys work very well together to weave deep, imprinted, lasting images. and, ah, freedom at last.
On Friday, November 9, 2012, FadedBlues (2169) wrote:

...captivating title & great write. the sweet taste of freedom...
On Friday, November 9, 2012, Star (920) wrote:

utterly perfect, and filled with emotion beyond compare! the third stanza was my favorite out of all.. but this poem defiantly deserves a 10... wow to the both of you... awesome (:
A former member wrote: Second and Third stanza, by far my favorite, You guys wrote beautifully and solid together, I command you to write together more, and fix what inconsistencies lie here in this site, with true meanings and feelings most of us can't put into words as perfect as this