"Krissy"
By King_Crazy_Dave
Never one taken with growing pains
stunted stalks wrapping round
thruway trackmark trains
their leaves dew-kissing trap house floors
as
predicted
long before the tenants were evicted
fickle finger vines hold the fruit of her body
draped on chainlink
sheer girl-gauze
other arm waving in the traffic pause, like a crumpled
napkin phone number
shes the ghost of a daughter or
the
saddled horse
holding a monopoly
on buyers remorse
"she
dont do that,
but she needs more smokes man so buy another pack"
or crack, or
you know, she's getting sick
just hurry on back
poison's poison runs itself off
the angels home to
sing
and in the clouds rejoice, voice soft as her wings
things
you know,
dont look so bad
but you can see them re-arrange
eyelids flutter to the song of spare-change
you know, shes
getting sick
hurry on back
just make it quick.
Author's Note:
To my friend, the prostitute-singerComments on ""Krissy""
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On Sunday, March 2, 2014, Syncretism
(35) wrote:
That last stanza bro. I relate to that. Can't tell you how much. You put the whole thing to words perfectly. Bows!
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On Wednesday, July 31, 2013, NarcissusNarcosis
(94) wrote:
Damn...you may act like an egotistical asshole on here(I have been accused of the same) but man, I gotta give props, respect where it's earned-this is very well-written..."she's getting sick; hurry on back, just make it quick..." My interpretation, of course, is withdrawals and trying to help a friend get through them... Such a nonchalant poetic feel in this. Not one to repeat what others have said, but the flow here has an almost musical feel to it, executed in a way that isn't forced or overbearing. You expressed some sharp skills here, and your theme is a relatable one. Exceptional post, nothing else to say. -NN
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A former member wrote:
The title caught my eye because it happens to be my name but this is not what I was expecting. Absolutely fantastic!
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A former member wrote:
I like this and she´s surely a diamond in the rough. Beáutiful work.
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On Saturday, December 1, 2012, GraveFlower
(249) wrote:
awe man,, the withdrawls are brutal, you notice that most look after eachother when it comes to the sickness..... this is a good write, i love reading when its real.
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On Friday, November 9, 2012, freudian-slip
(239) wrote:
im digging the eyelids flutter line alot
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A former member wrote:
dam that's good! How I hope to write like that sometime.
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A former member wrote:
You're writing is amazing, it flows so easily. I like how everything comes together.. I agree with Artanis, it is like reading lyrics to a song.
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On Sunday, September 16, 2012, Artanis
(56) wrote:
In my head reading this, it sounds like a song. Nicely done:)
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On Tuesday, September 11, 2012, Cassette
(1144) wrote:
I have always loved the way your words form this internal rhythm. "holding a monopoly/ on buyer's remorse/ "she don't do that,/ but she needs more smokes man so buy another pack"/ or crack or/ you know, she's getting sick/ so just hurry on back" This is my favorite section.
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A former member wrote:
Much love to your angel friend... I feel strong compassion for her.
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A former member wrote:
"she dont do that but she needs more smokes man so buy anyother pack, or crack or, you know, shes getting sick. just hurry on back." under your assface exterior lies a beautiful soul, sir.
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On Sunday, September 9, 2012, MikeShank1989
(93) wrote:
"Never one taken with growing pains stunted stalks wrapping round thruway trackmark trains their leaves dew-kissing trap house floors as predicted long before the tenants were evicted" That first stanza was fire and set a phenomenal tone for the piece. Thanks for the recommendation. Well written!
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A former member wrote:
I was close friends with a prostitute once. She was like a bucket of nails but deep down, she had a generous soul. Quite literally 'the hooker with a heart of gold'. Reminds me of her reading this character study. Welcome back...I am looking forward to more...
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On Saturday, September 8, 2012, Devilish
(2662) wrote:
Awe.. A whole different side of you .. =)
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On Saturday, September 8, 2012, FadedBlues
(2172) wrote:
...i'm standin on a downtown street corner watchin this, man. broken people, crippled souls, tryin to get thru another night. smokes, quarters, whatever we can bum off the straights...
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On Friday, September 7, 2012, lupus tenebrae
(872) wrote:
She sounds more real than most people these days, the term "diamond in the rough" forces its way into mind, reading this. I'll definitely say you're back, with this piece, a sleeper hold complete with a three-count.
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On Friday, September 7, 2012, Nehema
(962) wrote:
Thanks for sharing a look into a world most of us don't see. She sounds like a beautiful creature indeed, like a few I've had the pleasure to know - XXOO
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A former member wrote:
lyrical. ugly, ugly thing rendered beautifully. thank you.