Shakespearean Sordid Seductress and I

By Virgils Vigil


My temptress' eyes lack the smoldering heat,

Of the skies when lustfully our pale lips meet;

From her, frigid flakes revoke divine decent,

Far too baroque are her flesh and temperament;

Bleached and bloodless lay her withered waxen cheek,

a rose now broodless holds abysmal mystique;

For a pestilent taste, one could acquire,

Some hygienic paste, in spite her desires;

Bathed in charming wails, pleasures reminiscent,

Banshee's of Wales, or fruit grown indehiscent;

I've seen a goddess go, conceiving all sound,

She flaunts such modest flow, unearthing the ground;

Macabre is our passion, obsidian night,

Light and love, such fashions we vanquish from sight.



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Copyright 2011 Virgils Vigil
Published on Thursday, September 15, 2011.     Filed under: "Tribute" and "Poetry"

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  • A former member wrote: Aside from the revisions we talked about in the chatter, I think this is tight. Just a matter of getting rid of some extra words and this is worthy of submission.

  • dwells On Thursday, September 15, 2011, dwells (4288)By person wrote:

    Some unique and curious thoughts while reading this; has a lot of potential but lost me a little along the way, thanks!

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