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Girl, Your Smile
By carlosjackal
Mean life
Mean streets
The rain and concrete
A
constant reminder
Café warmth
Shiver this cough
Look
to the bar
The girl is there
So alone and afar
I take
the girl’s hand
And lead her outside
She’s holding a cigarette
As though searching for light
So I hold her chin with my finger
Take the lamp from her heart
Ignite a spark
That parts the
clouds
Return the lamp
And see the glow in her eyes
“How can I..”
“Girl, your smile.”
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© 2021 Carl Denyer
Published on Sunday, January 24, 2010.
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A former member wrote:
What a cunning linguist you are, my friend. I bet all the ladies heart the size of your pe....n. Amazingly well crafted. Your talent is very apparant. Well done, poet
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A former member wrote:
Very lovely indeed, my dear. Thank you for showing us your heart. Reb ;)
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A former member wrote:
Congrats on POTD, a deserving write, doubtless. Cheers, again, mate :)
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On Thursday, February 24, 2011, carlosjackal
(3011)
wrote:
Cheers, Ains! I'm so chuffed, especially as I only found out about receiving Poem Of The Day after coming back from a 5 day trip to Ireland. Yep, ecstatic :)
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A former member wrote:
really enjoyed this one
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A former member wrote:
sentimental and stylish, as seems to be your way. always a pleasure~happy new year
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On Saturday, January 1, 2011, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
Happy New Year, Ness :)
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On Thursday, January 28, 2010, Sin
(1168) wrote:
thank you for this Carl...this made me smile and left me with a warmth i needed today ~k
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On Friday, January 29, 2010, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
Anytime, Kristy :) xx
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On Sunday, January 24, 2010, Narcissa
(404) wrote:
How can a few lines dig into my heart and steal my breath? I will be smiling all day now...thanks to you...
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On Sunday, January 24, 2010, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
:) :) :) :)
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On Sunday, January 24, 2010, Rebel tiGer King
(258) wrote:
Carl, you are the king of these man, i can't even beging to express how great this is bro, this gives me hope of one day finding that girl and lighting that spark, thanks amigo -symph-
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On Thursday, April 23, 2020, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
Still love love love this comment especially as your words came true for you like a fairytale :)
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On Sunday, January 24, 2010, Myzeray
(17) wrote:
Wow! This piece is so cute! How often have I myself sat in a bar and wanted that ta happen? Good write. Keep it up!
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On Sunday, January 24, 2010, maggot death
(62) wrote:
wow! good love write. Is it love, romance,....other? Great write, overall. I specialize in love poems, and I'm glad to see a well written one here on DP:)
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A former member wrote:
Cheers! Mate! So often I have difficulty commenting on your work as it usually leads me so far into the distance I cannot find my own keyboard... but this wonderful little narrative provided me just enough basis from which to launch that I could find my way home... love the way the end opens a whole world within one word.... the volumes left unspoken... sheer devotion. Perhaps some recycled tropes, but still the sentiment is unmistakable, and the reaction elicited in me, undeniable.... kudos, mate!
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On Sunday, January 24, 2010, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
Cheers, Ainsof! :)
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