optically illusive: leashed of all my worries
By sIo
for the sake
of begging
in all it's dignity
that trail
of
liquid respect
left behind
when someone
finally
shoots
the hero
would someone else
please change
out
the sheets
and fall apart
in my place
no matter how dearly
i want to wind up
confetti, flush with
the floor
i'm just not hammered enough
for a ground bracing
hug
that will keep me AA sober
on my pilgrimage to pray
at the feet of the porcelain goddess
cold tile floors
and white noise
take the edge off
creating the sweet
circulation
of digging my own grave
one foothold deeper
to the perfect hospital corners
my shivering, blistered
hands have been sculpting
like origami
the art of slow
intricacy
the anticipation of knowing
the potential paper-sluts
in this bed i'm making
i don't know the
depth of
my ways
because like a fool
i touched the eye of the stove
leaving my palms a permanent
pond stirred blindly
so i'll run the length
of my chain
type writer fashion
you've got to give me more reason
to move
so sweet talk the
words
down my page
and i'll run lines back
and forth
until i break myself in
and familiarize myself
with these chain lengths
and just the right grip
to polish
this self inflicted
domino affect into
a five star pile up
so innocently curled
pressed between
my two fingers
that you bother not
to read between
the lines
never knowing
the depth
to the great length
of damage
i've run.
Comments on "optically illusive: leashed of all my worries"
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On Saturday, December 17, 2016, Phalanx
(677) wrote:
I'd like to soak into the spaces between your words and touch granite walls out of curiosity and hope. Backyard playground, give me something better than death kind of love. By God.
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On Tuesday, December 6, 2016, carlosjackal
(3010) wrote:
What a chain of words this still is after all these years..a great string of illusionary images flowing tightly from one line to the next. Top stuff.
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A former member wrote:
having a brother who is an alcoholic and being borderline myself, i feel you.
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On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, unspeakable truth
(100) wrote:
Intriguing title, all playing with the words...Which I have none that I can get to make sense here. Yet the emotion, runs deep.
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On Tuesday, March 31, 2009, sanglante
(17) wrote:
the emotions run straight to my bones. it's breathtaking.
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On Sunday, July 8, 2007, carlosjackal
(3010) wrote:
*awe-struck* What words....Don't know what to say, except, I love it =) -Carl
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A former member wrote:
"chain lengths' genius concept; visual entrapment/restraint. . . hardhitting piece. . ness
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On Saturday, July 7, 2007, Saint Sentient
(17) wrote:
crushing. it's the first word to come to mind.
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On Saturday, July 7, 2007, glasshouse
(548) wrote:
wow. this is intense. holy hell, woman. What a desperate and dangerous portrait you've given us here. The line between elegance and raw emotion is never a straight one with you. Well done. --Jes
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A former member wrote:
yeeeah boiiii! flavor fav'd!
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On Saturday, July 7, 2007, AHHH
(187) wrote:
i loved that.
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On Saturday, July 7, 2007, Err0r
(365) wrote:
I enjoyed the way it seemed like the first and last stanza meshed, however it was hard following the transitions between each stanza was choppy. Great write though. You have some of the best one liners in this write.
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On Sunday, July 8, 2007, Err0r
(365) wrote:
Now understanding certain parts better. I take part of my previous statement back. You rock and this is an amazing write. =)