six sense sex/druggy suicide
By sIo
let me introduce you
to my obsession
with ...s
...........t
............a
..............i
...............r
................s
a granddaddy long legs
step to the tick
of my grandfather
clock
time keeps tipping me off
raining spy glasses
shaking with spider bones
like rainmakers
on the run
from the shady
overhead cloud
taking refuge beneath our
webbed finger
umbrellas
dousing the church
and raping the steeple
ding dong stitching the doors
and drowning the people
like fate used our lifelines
as shoe laces
and puddle hopped
all the way back to hell
a smoke house of steam
hot boxing and shotgunning
our souls like dinner plates
reaping porcelain confetti
like coke
snorting lines off our spines
one by one
like packed cigarettes
drinking target practice
under the table
with a bluffed bulls eye
shooting double takes
with the portrait
on the wall
never knowing that
its hand was on the table
face down
with the pistol
in the hall
fair trade
was a shot to
the head
before and after
fair game was knowing
which shot
to enjoy most.
Comments on "six sense sex/druggy suicide"
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A former member wrote:
Superb, a very unique and original piece of work. slo is your antithesis..
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A former member wrote:
"like fate used our lifelines
as shoe laces
and puddle hopped
all the way back to hell" I hate the copy and quote comment...but those lines...damn..
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On Thursday, June 21, 2007, Revisable Retina
(83) wrote:
wanting more and more loved it sio this write was cool as hell dude. and i love your pic beautiful
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On Wednesday, June 20, 2007, Err0r
(365) wrote:
"Like fate used our lifelines as shoelaces" So true. So true. Wonderful write wrapped up with a wonderful closing.
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On Tuesday, June 19, 2007, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
Like multiple bullets to the brain but enjoyable. This was like a mad urban surreal joyride. Excellent stuff. -Carl
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On Tuesday, June 19, 2007, Preacher X
(35) wrote:
Delightfully macbre in such a wonderfully vivid sense. Bravo :)
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On Tuesday, June 19, 2007, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
Fuck.
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On Tuesday, June 19, 2007, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
ditto.
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On Tuesday, June 19, 2007, Bella Butchery
(724) wrote:
fresh and imaginative, finally some originallity being posted.
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On Tuesday, June 19, 2007, Aunty Depressant
(434) wrote:
I feel like I have Cab Calloway echoes and transpaencies of Tim Burton overlaying my conciousness as I read this...How Fun!