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Haggard
By glasshouse
I’ve never seen you
in civilians
open and ragged
haggard but beautiful
And
we’d drift
-swim- against the current
battle the tide
until the shore met the stars
or
met our lifeless bodies
And we’d lie
-die-
in one another’s arms…
…because if breath walked away
I’d never let you go
To chase after it
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© 2007 glasshouse
Published on Wednesday, May 23, 2007.
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A former member wrote:
how very sacrificing. it's overwhelming to know the way you would give so much with just a hope for a a return
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On Saturday, June 16, 2007, Dancing_Monkey
(1246)
wrote:
I like your use of wind, water and stars. You make it preaty to say the least. A short write, but a wellkept feeling
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On Wednesday, May 30, 2007, Grim_Sorrow
(75) wrote:
beautifull imagery, I love the thought you put into it, especially the last 3 lines. To hold on to that which you love despite the cost, truly beautifull.
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On Tuesday, May 29, 2007, Trigger
(70) wrote:
So sombre, meloncholy, the way it is worded is as B.U. put it, gentle. Excellant write. -Saeth-
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A former member wrote:
"…because if breath walked away". Simple, yet elegant. There is an epic hint at so much more that you leave to the moment, as expressed by the title. And a gentle sadness that is so much more profound, told between the words; "_______ but beautiful."
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A former member wrote:
the personification is perfection; breath walking away, abandoning 'us', holding on to what is so human in each of us. . . .introspective; intuitive; intelligent. . . ~ness
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On Wednesday, May 23, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
shivers. me too.. loved this to death.
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