Haggard

By glasshouse

I’ve never seen you
in civilians
open and ragged
haggard but beautiful


And
we’d drift
-swim- against the current
battle the tide
until the shore met the stars
or
met our lifeless bodies




And we’d lie

-die-

in one another’s arms…







…because if breath walked away

I’d never let you go

To chase after it

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© 2007 glasshouse
Published on Wednesday, May 23, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: how very sacrificing. it's overwhelming to know the way you would give so much with just a hope for a a return

  • Dancing_Monkey On Saturday, June 16, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1288)By person wrote:

    I like your use of wind, water and stars. You make it preaty to say the least. A short write, but a wellkept feeling

  • Grim_Sorrow On Wednesday, May 30, 2007, Grim_Sorrow (77)By person wrote:

    beautifull imagery, I love the thought you put into it, especially the last 3 lines. To hold on to that which you love despite the cost, truly beautifull.

  • Trigger On Tuesday, May 29, 2007, Trigger (75)By person wrote:

    So sombre, meloncholy, the way it is worded is as B.U. put it, gentle. Excellant write. -Saeth-

  • A former member wrote: "because if breath walked away". Simple, yet elegant. There is an epic hint at so much more that you leave to the moment, as expressed by the title. And a gentle sadness that is so much more profound, told between the words; "_______ but beautiful."

  • A former member wrote: the personification is perfection; breath walking away, abandoning 'us', holding on to what is so human in each of us. . . .introspective; intuitive; intelligent. . . ~ness

  • Tania On Wednesday, May 23, 2007, Tania (197)By person wrote:

    shivers. me too.. loved this to death.

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