By glasshouse

I’ve never seen you
in civilians
open and ragged
haggard but beautiful

we’d drift
-swim- against the current
battle the tide
until the shore met the stars
met our lifeless bodies

And we’d lie


in one another’s arms…

…because if breath walked away

I’d never let you go

To chase after it

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© 2007 glasshouse
Published on Wednesday, May 23, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: how very sacrificing. it's overwhelming to know the way you would give so much with just a hope for a a return

  • Dancing_Monkey On Saturday, June 16, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1288)By person wrote:

    I like your use of wind, water and stars. You make it preaty to say the least. A short write, but a wellkept feeling

  • Grim_Sorrow On Wednesday, May 30, 2007, Grim_Sorrow (77)By person wrote:

    beautifull imagery, I love the thought you put into it, especially the last 3 lines. To hold on to that which you love despite the cost, truly beautifull.

  • Trigger On Tuesday, May 29, 2007, Trigger (75)By person wrote:

    So sombre, meloncholy, the way it is worded is as B.U. put it, gentle. Excellant write. -Saeth-

  • A former member wrote: "because if breath walked away". Simple, yet elegant. There is an epic hint at so much more that you leave to the moment, as expressed by the title. And a gentle sadness that is so much more profound, told between the words; "_______ but beautiful."

  • A former member wrote: the personification is perfection; breath walking away, abandoning 'us', holding on to what is so human in each of us. . . .introspective; intuitive; intelligent. . . ~ness

  • Tania On Wednesday, May 23, 2007, Tania (197)By person wrote:

    shivers. me too.. loved this to death.

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