Water born

By Sin

oceans collect in my veins
the ebb and flow of eternity tucked inside a kiss
the moon, a bitter mistress
that no longer holds sway over these tides
crumbles in an eclipse of starbursts
as russet hues drift
across breaking cresents of midnight
clouds collecting upon my lashes
as sand fingers catch foamy waves
before releasing their turbulance
back into the night
this gush of free flowing emotion
leaves me empty
and i settle back into the calm
of this hushed serenity

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© 2007 Sin
Published on Thursday, April 5, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cassette On Thursday, November 2, 2017, Cassette (1261)By person wrote:

    wonderful, but I expected nothing less from you.

  • Sin On Thursday, November 2, 2017, Sin (1179)By person wrote:

    Thank you for taking the time to comment

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, May 15, 2008, carlosjackal (2477)By person wrote:

    Come back :(

  • jack paper On Wednesday, July 18, 2007, jack paper (127)By person wrote:

    beautiful, i really love this, better with every read

  • Tonights Decision On Sunday, June 17, 2007, Tonights Decision (142)By person wrote:

    in such rivers.. waitig for the tides.. this was so easy to lose oneself in... so easy..

  • mysticventures On Wednesday, May 16, 2007, mysticventures (484)By person wrote:

    vivid beauty

  • island warrior On Sunday, April 15, 2007, island warrior (216)By person wrote:

    Wonderful as always.

  • A former member wrote: very nice...took me to a place far far away.

  • A former member wrote: really awesome

  • A former member wrote: this is splendid. a washed feeling of white overtures, with a blush of radiant serenity. beautiful.

  • A former member wrote: this poem is wonderful. love the analogy. the first four lines (for me) in particular are a dream..i would bookmark if it wasn't for the quota thingy .. bravo!

  • Sin On Monday, April 9, 2007, Sin (1179)By person wrote:

    thank you thats quite a compliment :)

  • jack paper On Monday, April 9, 2007, jack paper (127)By person wrote:

    you wash the dirt and darkness from long-lost-images in my mind and you give them life and brush them beautiful again... this is imbued with passion

  • Mylissa On Sunday, April 8, 2007, Mylissa (853)By person wrote:

    what a trip..I feel your words with beauty that presses against your lips. remarkable.

  • A former member wrote: i have to agree with Aunty, this did sound pretty orgasmic..."this gush of free flowing emotion leaves me empty.." That explains how it feels....beautiful write.

  • Lynaes On Sunday, April 8, 2007, Lynaes (878)By person wrote:

    hushed serenity... so, so beautiful. there are always phrases that stick in my mind in your poetry, you just put things across so eloquently.. Stunning, as you are. :)

  • carlosjackal On Friday, April 6, 2007, carlosjackal (2477)By person wrote:

    Perfect! I agree with Cloud, you should be published.

  • Bella Butchery On Friday, April 6, 2007, Bella Butchery (734)By person wrote:

    emotionally epic. weaving words like webs, maybe you should publish?

  • Alanarchy On Friday, April 6, 2007, Alanarchy (1123)By person wrote:

    "Clouds collecting upon my lashes" I really got caught up in that line. Not sure why. I loved the images it, really this whole thing, brings out. Hey, all I can do is echo the hatter, and agree with mrs depressant. Beautiful, sugar.

  • nur hidayah On Thursday, April 5, 2007, nur hidayah (122)By person wrote:

    Yes, I agree. Orgasmic tempest! 'oceans collect in my veins' Mmm powerful. Thank you for sharing.

  • blue On Thursday, April 5, 2007, blue (1458)By person wrote:

    rawr! cook some more. lady.

  • blue On Thursday, April 5, 2007, blue (1458)By person wrote:

    damn, i just rhymed

  • Dei On Thursday, April 5, 2007, Dei (708)By person wrote:

    this is probably your best that ive read. Nicely done

  • Aunty Depressant On Thursday, April 5, 2007, Aunty Depressant (436)By person wrote:

    Ahhhh, sounds orgasmic ;)

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