A Screaming sea-gull.. she cries.. she cries

By Tania

I fell in love at harbour bay…
Where broken grey skies wavered over all day..
the Sea-weed speckled shore line caught my eye
As the up-heaving ocean came to rise
Our crumbling footsteps they slowly died..
A screaming sea-gull she cried ..she cried

A String of bobbing buoys lay dead at sea
Chained to the seabed.. Swaying helplessly..
As I looked to the jagged cliffs that lay in the near
My lover in hand led me to the abandoned pier
As each wave crashed.. the next it died
A screaming sea-gull she cried… she cried

Surrounded by rocks that lay so corrupt
Eternally tormented by the oceans lust
a cool salty breeze cast herself into a gust
like an alluring mist throwing her cuss
And as I looked into my lovers eyes..
A screaming sea-gull she cried.. She cried

I fell in love at harbour bay..
Where broken grey skies wavered over all day..
And as I head down to the shore line once more
With only these salt wounds left to adore,
I look to the ocean and how livid she lies..
As a screaming sea-gull she cries.. she cries..

*Im unsure as to wether i like this or not..so any feedback OR criticism is Welcome*
Thank you!

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Published on Wednesday, February 21, 2007. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "A Screaming sea-gull.. she cries.. she cries"

On Monday, March 19, 2007, Disassembly Boy (61) wrote:

this was beautifully sad.
A former member wrote: "With only these salt wounds left to adore" This has a lovely emotive feel, and it flows as the grey oceans or those "screaming sea-gull"s you describe. It is lyrical, vivid & quite lovely (I luv the repetitions within). Well done.
On Thursday, February 22, 2007, LOKI (164) wrote:

I liked it.The imagery with the ocean.The passion for your lover.This was an amazing write.Im faving it.
On Saturday, February 24, 2007, Tania (197) wrote:

:)
On Thursday, February 22, 2007, prettydisgrace (96) wrote:

i thought it was great too.. you got mail :)
A former member wrote: I thought it was great. Don't be so hard on yourself
On Wednesday, February 21, 2007, GraveFlower (249) wrote:

wow, thats real good...........nice~*dani*~
On Wednesday, February 21, 2007, Mylissa (845) wrote:

I absolutely love this. I think the flow, the style, and the words are wonderful.
On Wednesday, February 21, 2007, Bella Butchery (724) wrote:

i love posts about oceans/ocean settings, doesnt matter what emotions they envoke, it always seems to make them float in an endless current, bravo kiddo!
A former member wrote: I love the sea-gull imagery...actually, I love ALL the imagery, but "as a screaming sea-gull she cries..she cries.." hits something deep within me. Excellent piece. ~*Beth*~
A former member wrote: well, even if you're undecided, I enjoyed it. The flow worked for me, as did your rythm... good write