This Walked too Far-off to Become Untitled

By Rebel_not_Radical


~"You walked too far off"~




too far off from sanity




A little girl with specks of silver
In her eyes whispered eerily
Whilst twirling her hair




A popped-bubblegum mass
Shining, entwining
Like her pale skin to mine




she said after floating
for a minute or two:





"Hey can you help me find my color wheel?"





And she tugged at my sleeve
Where I wear my heart






sometimes...



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© 2006 Tetch de la Cruz
Published on Friday, September 22, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Tuesday, January 16, 2018, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    Yep, this is brilliant.

  • A former member wrote: "Hey can you help me find my color wheel?" First: The Title is Fantastic.The concept is quite fantastical;soft & subtle;makes me think of the smokeghost in Gibson's "Mona Lisa Overdrive", even though they really are not even close (weird, or wired)...

  • hate_doll On Friday, October 20, 2006, hate_doll (265)By person wrote:

    hehe, this is very cute and flawless in its sismplicity.

  • A former member wrote: just completely, and simply beautiful.

  • TaintedButterfly On Monday, September 25, 2006, TaintedButterfly (670)By person wrote:

    I may as well just faint now. Brilliant, and just enough pain to peek through. Damn, you guys are killin' me! Well done. Julia~

  • Dissolving Poet On Friday, September 22, 2006, Dissolving Poet (564)By person wrote:

    *sighs* I loved this one, my eyes were dancing with beauty that you sprinkled into them, and the words floated into my heart and stayed until there was no energy left to sustain such weight, of great words ~Gothic

  • Alanarchy On Friday, September 22, 2006, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    Loved it all, especially the way you ended it (Loved that pulling drop toward eternity), even though I was a little bit dissapointed when it actually did end. Nice work.

  • A former member wrote: "And she tugged at my sleeve/Where I wear my heart/sometimes..." You caught at my heart with the very first word and drew me in so deeply, I could barely risk taking my eyes from the screen before the end. Excellent. ~*Beth*~

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