-so you tell her you mister- and let her be amiss-

By swing_the_hammer

i feel heavy
like a hammer falling
i'm unsteady
think i hear you calling
-so i swing-
and i lean...

and wonder if you're listening

i'm reminded of you sometimes
of how you always seem to get me
(entangled in your well-worded rhymes)
captivated by electric lines of poetry
-so i spark and i shine-
accept and decline...

and wonder if i'm yours or mine

i feel deadly
a lover on a waiting list
i'm a medley
of the lyrics between the wrist
and the resist
and when it seemed all others missed
my brain and your bullets kissed...

i wonder if you're reading this

of all committed love crimes
perhaps it is the greater sin
to see within these rhymes
are all that we have ever been
to say there is still time
yet never knowing when...

and i wonder if the ink stirs under your skin
each time you reach for a pen...

i feel ready
like the hammer that i am
waiting...steady
pivoting on a pin
baiting...ready
for that slow cylinder to spin
is your trigger finger heavy?
because every time you let it fall
you blow me away
again and again and again

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© 2006 swing_the_hammer
Published on Saturday, August 19, 2006.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • sIo On Friday, December 30, 2016, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    My chest is caving into a gasp. Tell me there is so much more of this.

  • BetaWolfinVA On Sunday, September 14, 2014, BetaWolfinVA (795)By person wrote:

    what a ride:) Scholar

  • Ravenblade On Saturday, March 9, 2013, Ravenblade (313)By person wrote:

    This is powerful...the anticipation and wait is killer, and I've never seen or heard it put this way, kept in a writing state...

  • Niemand On Sunday, February 17, 2008, Niemand (361)By person wrote:

    FANTASTIC!! -Geisha

  • Alanarchy On Thursday, August 16, 2007, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    Everyone else has already said it, but Jesus Christ, that title! And then there's that last section. I just stepped on a land mine.

  • A former member wrote: I love poems like this. A personal story yet written well enough to stand on its own poetic feet. And this is very well written

  • elisa On Friday, January 19, 2007, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    the title is genius..... the poem ....speaks for itself.... love it.

  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, January 3, 2007, carlosjackal (3016)By person wrote:

    This was smooth, fluid, and absolutely gorgeous.

  • Mylissa On Tuesday, January 2, 2007, Mylissa (845)By person wrote:

    beautiful.

  • A former member wrote: spectacular! great job ~Tamara

  • A former member wrote: This is a wonderful write I can see the emotion with in the lines of this peice

  • blue On Saturday, August 19, 2006, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    echo, this was fantastic. Entirely fantastic! ~b

  • A former member wrote: hot damn. i'm with six out, this was amazing..both the title and the piece. "i feel deadly/a lover on a waiting list/i'm a medley/of the lyrics between the wrist" very smooth and lyrical..and fantastic closing stanza. this was great.

  • blue On Saturday, August 19, 2006, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    lmao! o.O)) you said hot damn!

  • Six-Out On Saturday, August 19, 2006, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    holy fucking hell. the title is amazing. The poem is amazing. This completely humbled me. I'm amazed dear, you're astounding.

  • xserratedsoulx On Saturday, August 19, 2006, xserratedsoulx (212)By person wrote:

    and i wonder if the ink stirs under your skin each time you reach for a pen... adore it! ~lauren~

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