Night So Dark

By cre

Night so dark and day so cold I always did what I was told
And here I lie and now I cry and wait for little girl to die
Hand on fist I push against the feelings that become of this
Covered eyes and hidden lies and feelings never un-despised
Shackled hands and banded feet while jesus save me I repeat
No ears hear my hidden fears or see the crashing of my tears
Like wave on rock, no key for lock and all I have is empty talk
Empty hollow like a bell no salvation in my hell
Who are you and who am I, who I was has long since died
No more feelings no more thoughts no more battles being fought
So that was me but I’m not free, still tied down by history
So there I lie, and choose to die. And all the shame’s .. forever mine.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Friday, April 4, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Step_20 On Thursday, January 18, 2007, Step_20 (25)By person wrote:

    a chant more than a poem. It sounds like something that could be repeated over and over...kinda like Demos said. A favorite of mine

  • Demosthenes On Friday, November 7, 2003, Demosthenes (155)By person wrote:

    i just read this and said to hattie, "my god. shes so awesome. i could just die thinking im a poet." i kept getting this picture of someone walking around a stage with audiences all round reciting this and growing increasingly louder and louder and faster

  • Demosthenes On Friday, November 7, 2003, Demosthenes (155)By person wrote:

    until! at the end, she stops, and says the second half of the last line softly, then drops her head. the lights fade to black. now think that in your brain. multiply it by fifty billion times, and you have some slight notion of how awesome it is. -B

  • A former member wrote: YOU ARE FUCKING AWESOME......You are like a fucking celebrity to me.Your writes tkae my breath away, you're just amazing, I can't express that well enough.Keep it up, YOU'RE AWESOME!

  • DoctorAsh On Sunday, May 11, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    Into the dryer most would put thier dilapidated clothes ... but not us, we wear them until they become *worn* "Who are you and who am I, who I was has long since died" ... such artistics, wonderful

  • liquid_emotion On Monday, April 7, 2003, liquid_emotion (323)By person wrote:

    this was so .... helpless. i feel almost honored reading some of your things.

  • A former member wrote: holy crap that was tight. I'm sorry I haven't read your newest works in a little while. I need to brush up on my cre. :)

  • A former member wrote: Ahh, sweetie, there's always a bright room at the end of our dark hallways...your skill is your saviour, that's all you'll ever need...

  • A former member wrote: I think I will have to go with what everyone else says.. Awesome poem.. nice job cre.. keep writing.ADNW

  • Six-Out On Friday, April 4, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Jane, I'm just gonna stop commenting, becuase, damn, you know its good.

  • cre On Friday, April 4, 2003, cre (411)By person wrote:

    your comments always make me smile! thanks :)

  • diavolessa On Friday, April 4, 2003, diavolessa (208)By person wrote:

    cre this is really really awesome! i liked the "who I was has long since died" a lot. its simple but there seems to be a lot of feelings in there! ty for sharing! :)

  • A former member wrote: I love it

  • A former member wrote: Fabulous job cre. I don kno whut to say ~~~**~~~Ashley~~~**~~~

  • A former member wrote: WOW! ab-fab lady! this was AWESOME!


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