becoming poetry

By purr_verse


i found myself today
becoming poetry;
paperthin and stupidly fragile
too many scribbles
too many mistakes,
and an overworked line
still dripping cliche,
consistently failing to make sense

but i think my basic idea
is a good one
and sometimes there is no scribbling,
just certainty,
and i like that little verse
at the heart of it all
and i hope you do too
and maybe you'll even love it,
reread it over&over
tattoo it somewhere inside
and treasure it,
even though it's only
a neverending draft

and maybe you'll wait for me
to get that final stanza right,
find the dance of inspiration
wordshaping me perfect
and immortal;

but if i do not,
i hope that little verse
at the heart of it all -
surrounded by error
and another cliche -
stays with you regardless,
incomplete yet


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© 2006 Natalie Lyndon
Published on Thursday, June 22, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: :) Oh, how i associate. That one verse which stays the same whilst all around it changes again and again. i could wait a year and return, rewrite and churn life into the lifeless clay...and i could erase all that, the sole, remaining verse stays the same. Can it stand on its own? Oh, but i want to give it more legs, more tongues, more eyes... eventually it comes. :)

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, March 15, 2008, carlosjackal (2470)By person wrote:

    =D..Words fail me :)

  • Sin On Friday, January 5, 2007, Sin (1179)By person wrote:

    theres nothing i can say that hasnt already been said, just know that i adore this ~kristy

  • Rebel_not_Radical On Tuesday, October 31, 2006, Rebel_not_Radical (78)By person wrote:

    ~undescribable...i just want to keep this poem for myself...haha how selfish of me...but really this is just one cool write...unlike all your other works this seems to be simple yet still packing that poetic punch...very cool

  • Carmina Gitana On Monday, September 18, 2006, Carmina Gitana (159)By person wrote:

    I love this, like everyone else. So simple, and straightforward and personal, nothing shocking, nothing overblown - just measured, dignified and beautiful. Thank you, I needed this today.

  • BoldSolitude On Tuesday, September 5, 2006, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    great portrayel of the process, it's often hard to make the work live up to the idea or mean as much as "that little verse at the heart of it all"

  • blue On Sunday, August 13, 2006, blue (1458)By person wrote:

    haha! ahhh, I love this. Love it. You brought a big ole smile to me face Ms. Purr. Indeed. *you get a cookie* =) ~b

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Saturday, August 12, 2006, Spiritus_Frumenti (343)By person wrote:

    "wordshaping me perfect and immortal". God i've missed you. -l-

  • OLd SouL On Wednesday, July 12, 2006, OLd SouL (781)By person wrote:

    You are adored... every little flaw and perfection... You could write a wanted ad and it would be splendiferous. :::OLd

  • A former member wrote: ah the cleverness is just amazing, just gorgeous, you are talented beyond belief ~Tamara

  • A former member wrote: The poem that that we are forever revising. You have a true gift for the metaphor. This is a joy...

  • NikesRain On Friday, June 23, 2006, NikesRain (1343)By person wrote:

    wonderfully put and posed.. and yet it's more than just a little verse for you are in it and in keeping that close one knows a touch of wonder of your beauty and talent and lovely spirit.. a priceless gift... well done indeed..

  • A former member wrote: "paperthin and stupidly fragile" Beautiful: a perfect verse. You have giving life to these little words, these playful scribbles... and they dance like so many spiderglyphs on waterdrops... well done.

  • A former member wrote: oh, this is simply fantastic, from the title to the conclusion..i loved all of this, it's too clever. "and i like that little verse at the heart of it all and i hope you do too" this made me smile. great write :)

  • flying_fox On Thursday, June 22, 2006, flying_fox (596)By person wrote:

    you are just too adorable for words. Everything about you - not just your essence or that 'little verse' - is wonderful. I love thsi piece and the notion of 'love me with my faults' - or perhaps despite of them - is noble and true. love you more than I co

  • flying_fox On Thursday, June 22, 2006, flying_fox (596)By person wrote:

    uld ever say. *mwah mwah mwah*

  • A former member wrote: "wordshaping me perfect"--great write! It reminds me a little of an Erich Fromm quote: "The whole life of the individual is nothing but the process of giving birth to himself; indeed, we should be fully born when we die." ;)

  • Anth On Thursday, June 22, 2006, Anth (1142)By person wrote:

    i never know what my poems will be about, but i admire in you the feeling i get that you have an idea somewhere during the day, and know exactly what your going to write,

  • Anth On Thursday, June 22, 2006, Anth (1142)By person wrote:

    like you had such a good idea and then you worded it so flawlessly, another remarkable creation from you

  • TaintedButterfly On Thursday, June 22, 2006, TaintedButterfly (675)By person wrote:

    As it does at this very moment dear heart! I adore this and you hun! Words fail me here... becoming poetry? No you are poetry! *hugs* Julia~

  • ShardsofSilence On Thursday, June 22, 2006, ShardsofSilence (226)By person wrote:

    I must say, I really enjoyed reading this :) Your words were sincere and the concept was brilliantly written out with your beauty

  • AniDayz On Thursday, June 22, 2006, AniDayz (822)By person wrote:

    . . . beautiful . . . the title drew me in, and you kept me going. . .

  • Dei On Thursday, June 22, 2006, Dei (706)By person wrote:

    always a pleasure reading... NAY, expiriencing your posts

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