Someone I Could Have Loved

By veingo

Her name....


I'll never tell...


I simply called her lovely...




I remember thinking to myself

A girl like this, could lead to a need
for a tiny little heart shaped coffin.



It still haunts me occasionally.

Oh the memories...



She painted erotic pictures in the back of my mind,
just by looking into my eyes.

And I hit the floor like a ghost,
who'd just seen his own reflection.



She purred a deep, warm moan when I kissed her.

And all the world turned the color of lust.

(just a shade darker than blood red)


She tore away my old armor,
like so much tissue paper.

And freed my wings from atrophy.


She said she could see inside of me.
And to my astonishment, she proved it.


God, these memories.

They're adding up to negatives.



Regret has all the perks of cancer,
without the benefit of an ending.

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© 2006 veingo
Published on Monday, May 15, 2006.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • terris crimson On Tuesday, March 2, 2021, terris crimson (169)By person wrote:

    Forgot the effect your poems have on me. Wonderful write.

  • Beautiful Incidental On Monday, October 1, 2012, Beautiful Incidental (39)By person wrote:

    .................bookmarking. love.

  • Maladroit On Thursday, August 16, 2012, Maladroit (202)By person wrote:

    .. So glad this randomly popped up on my homepage...

  • TheCreepIngCrow On Saturday, July 28, 2012, TheCreepIngCrow (35)By person wrote:

    Breathtaking...

  • A former member wrote: Wow...I feel like I'm about to cry. That's deep, and amazing.

  • Dreaming in Stanzas On Monday, February 13, 2012, Dreaming in Stanzas (303)By person wrote:

    So I read this poem forever ago (like years ago) and LOVED it.. then today while stalking you I found it again and realized that I still love it. You captured the emotion of hating to love someone so well. Sigh.

  • A former member wrote: "God, these memories./They're adding up to negatives." I absolutely love this poem and especially those partucular words. The way they have several meanings within what was said is just amazing. Thank you for this piece.

  • A former member wrote: This reminds me of someone I did love, but can not stand to love. The last two lines really stood out for me, just wishing it would end. I suck at leaving comments but I truly appreciated this piece. Thank you and good job.

  • Sketso On Monday, July 27, 2009, Sketso (436)By person wrote:

    ...and even still, I stick with the word 'deadly'. This is one of those works in which you can feel the ache building, but must read through to the end, just because.

  • Sketso On Thursday, November 5, 2009, Sketso (436)By person wrote:

    Even still... I could give this poem a different name, as could many I'm sure, but she wouldn't understand. This one is timeless.

  • Sketso On Monday, January 19, 2009, Sketso (436)By person wrote:

    holy hell, how did I miss this one? too many lines in this one to quote the ones that ate into my mind... but those last 2 lines... you, sir, have a talent at turning the deadly into an amazing read.

  • Lylani On Tuesday, January 6, 2009, Lylani (116)By person wrote:

    Just reread this and it still hits hard amazing piece " I simply called her lovely... " really feeling that line tonight

  • Leith Plunkett On Saturday, December 13, 2008, Leith Plunkett (239)By person wrote:

    (She painted erotic pictures in the back of my mind, just by looking into my eyes.) So sensual...It reads like it is written in blood from your severed heart...I hope some day you find something so beautiful again. Perfectly captured

  • Lylani On Wednesday, October 15, 2008, Lylani (116)By person wrote:

    'And I hit the floor like a ghost, who'd just seen his own reflection.' such powerful imagery throughout amazing work you show such reverence to these memories

  • A former member wrote: /Regret has all the perks of cancer/without the benefit of an ending/ I love this. Perfect ending for this piece.

  • Scarrzz On Monday, September 15, 2008, Scarrzz (238)By person wrote:

    Oh my word. That is starkly descriptive. I know this place. Thank you for the write. Instant fav. Scholar

  • Reefer_rave On Monday, March 31, 2008, Reefer_rave (146)By person wrote:

    flipping amazing... I love the end

  • anakronistik_me On Wednesday, January 16, 2008, anakronistik_me (24)By person wrote:

    "tiny little heart shaped coffin" killed me. as did the last two lines... it's like my inner voice has them on repeat. well done. brilliant. -sarah.

  • A former member wrote: when they say it is better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all,they are lying through their teeth. all I can say is, damn!

  • Lynaes On Thursday, December 13, 2007, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    "a girl like this could lead to the need for a tiny little heart shaped coffin" My god.. That particular line, and "she tore away my old armor like so much tissue paper." I felt this poem.. Walls crumbling like sandcastles.. the entire world doused in what they make you feel.. and you know it's going to be bad for you.. like superman kissing kryptonite. This was wonderful.

  • A former member wrote: funny how i can never find the right words for my favourite 'words'; this just is........IS...........egads

  • Sin On Monday, May 14, 2007, Sin (1168)By person wrote:

    jesus Ron...this was like a shot gun blast..and those last two lines fucking killed me ~kristy

  • A former member wrote: a tiny heart shaped coffin.... *sigh* somehow those words pierce me. if I could, I'd hug your words. RAIN~

  • beautifulfallenangel On Thursday, February 22, 2007, beautifulfallenangel (63)By person wrote:

    how much more right can you be.......... regret is the hardest to live with.. beautiful

  • A former member wrote: the way you tie regret to cancer and then bust out the worst part of it all, living through it. so fucking beautiful.

  • Mylissa On Saturday, November 11, 2006, Mylissa (845)By person wrote:

    Simply beautiful!

  • A former member wrote: She was a lier. Believe me.

  • weyvern On Tuesday, May 30, 2006, weyvern (80)By person wrote:

    thats so beautiful! "just a shade darker than blood red" i love it! it has to be your best by far

  • BrokenButterflyWings On Friday, May 19, 2006, BrokenButterflyWings (33)By person wrote:

    i love the vivid imagery in this.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    The fact that her name is never to be said also shows the awe your still in, either of the pain it would bring, or the fear of breaking the illusion she left you with

  • Dancing_Monkey On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    So much imagery painted. a shadow ghost unfolding wings, left me thinking, bat/dragon wings or those of a dove/angel. We all rise to free ourself of the killing feeling of regret. This made me realise what I had happely forgotten

  • A former member wrote: holy shit.... those last two lines man.... god damn...

  • veingo On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, veingo (533)By person wrote:

    You are all too kind! Thank you. ^V^

  • TaintedButterfly On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, TaintedButterfly (670)By person wrote:

    The way you write is amazing, because it is entirely from your heart & soul! I know the feelings you speak of too well. V- this was beautiful. *bravo* m'dear. Julia~

  • A former member wrote: "Regret has all the perks of cancer, without the benefit of an ending" holy shit dude. This just might be my fav or yours so far. I love it. ~Lost

  • Cattarax On Monday, May 15, 2006, Cattarax (215)By person wrote:

    ..... HOLY SHIT this is all the things that I miss ... great write even though I know have tears in my eyes

  • A former member wrote: My God. there are no other words for it. It is a beautifully written piece of art. i must say, you are a master.

  • Dissolving Poet On Monday, May 15, 2006, Dissolving Poet (564)By person wrote:

    is just as lovely as you are, I hope you know that. I could just drink this up forever and ever this is my second time reading it and I can't get enough of it. You rocked my day today with this... It was splendid

  • Dissolving Poet On Monday, May 15, 2006, Dissolving Poet (564)By person wrote:

    Your an angelic god this was just beautiful it swept me away until I could feel nothing but love, this was just beyond thoughts and words. You seem to be your all in it. And it just made someone float. It kicked butt and also my heart into love. This

  • A former member wrote: "A girl like this, could lead to a need for a tiny little heart shaped coffin." very beautiful, but so sad. i love the way you wrote this, ron, and that ending was a kick. wonderful write.

  • TornPaperDoll On Monday, May 15, 2006, TornPaperDoll (63)By person wrote:

    "a tiny little heart-shaped coffin" OooOoo..i DO love! TPD


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