blink-breathe-repeat

By Six-Out

.blink.

I tasted heaven- in her tears
and breathed a bittersweet breath. of acrid emotion
amotion. of self.
and break me down in the process.

punch-drunk and bereaved. head hung low.
thinking. of this first taste of defeat- on the brink of relief
gritting teeth- with broken dreams
and self afflicted semi-something. no.
it's nothing in the least.

at least. that's what she said to me.

.breathe.

but never blink- life exists on the brink
between what we live and what we see.
and what we hate- it's impossible to retrieve.
and no. I'll never fucking believe.

a despondant- redundant, rhetorical piece.
of illusion. dillusion seems to bring.
brokendown peace. there's a choice- or so it seems
retracing starplexed voices
and noises that mark the decease. and we're lost.
the cost of the dream
is inevitable. someone save me.

.fail.

we're invisible.
life is lived on the edge of credible.
and tonight. I'll just be.

yes. I'll just be.

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© 2006 Six-Out
Published on Friday, February 3, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: I can't believe I never commented on this... I must not have been able to even summon words after reading... I probably just blinked... TRIED to breathe... favorited it and let it soak into my brain! Well, I read it again and I'm still overwhelmed... but I wanted to tell you just how much I love it. I love it like I love oxygen... Refreshing, taunting, and explosive.

  • A former member wrote: mmm...Nope

  • PoeticHellion On Tuesday, May 9, 2006, PoeticHellion (191)By person wrote:

    Mmm. Yes. Just... being. Wow. Beautifully written. Poigent in fact. Just... mmm. Perfection, rather Buddhist in a way.

  • A former member wrote: This is still fucking awsome...

  • A former member wrote: These are moments of soft discreet beauty, and I feel you have captured the essence of them, and if you did not, they would escape into the universe unlived.

  • A former member wrote: That and the inner philosophical turmoil, perhaps present in all of us, but is made conscious here, as though it's at the surface and can be understood, almost.

  • AniDayz On Wednesday, April 12, 2006, AniDayz (820)By person wrote:

    i have missed your fukking voice.

  • Vicious Pixie On Thursday, March 23, 2006, Vicious Pixie (62)By person wrote:

    i like this. alot. speaks or brokenhearted despondency.

  • A former member wrote: nice. song lyrics or somethin?

  • A former member wrote: kool poem i liked it im ijustkilledmyself i just started yesterday i have 10 poems on here so far would like some feed back on what u think thanks

  • A former member wrote: you forgot to rinse.

  • Lotophagi On Saturday, March 4, 2006, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    I think this has to be my favourite piece of yours.... it's incredible, stunning write, a knock to the jaw and an eye-opener to life and living, being human, emotional torment and turmoil and acceptance of such. brilliant write. Thank you.

  • Future of Despond On Saturday, March 4, 2006, Future of Despond (72)By person wrote:

    huh.

  • Malice In Wonderland On Thursday, March 2, 2006, Malice In Wonderland (987)By person wrote:

    I say kick her in the shin...this was beautiful./ Scholar

  • Sky Singer On Saturday, February 25, 2006, Sky Singer (153)By person wrote:

    breathless indeed. i'm sorry i took the haitus, but it was much-needed. and yes, my dear, i do miss our little chats ^.^ as always, an excellent work, friend.

  • manywalks On Friday, February 24, 2006, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    This was.....elegant. ~ wen

  • Drayvinio On Wednesday, February 15, 2006, Drayvinio (19)By person wrote:

    Beautiful. Simply beautiful. Loved the emotions!

  • Philla On Wednesday, February 15, 2006, Philla (95)By person wrote:

    Breathless....

  • A former member wrote: Damn dude. I loved it. Strait foward with emotions.

  • PoeticHellion On Wednesday, February 8, 2006, PoeticHellion (191)By person wrote:

    I love this. seriously. You are insane, and everything you write is fabulous, and exciting. I could keep up with the piece. Fast moving. A++

  • A former member wrote: wow... this is a great write

  • A former member wrote: reads like some final coup de gras, and the breathing... almost heard shakingly in and between the lines of need...so full....very rare write...

  • A former member wrote: This is gloriously painful..and I can't put words to how this has latched on and kept squeezing my heart..purity from emotion, formed by thought, written, signed as art. This is inspired..

  • A former member wrote: "breathe. but never blink- life exists on the brink between what we live and what we see." Fuck man. Heavy. Can't tell if the ending is a breath of relief or a breath of defeat for me, maybe a little of both.

  • NikesRain On Friday, February 3, 2006, NikesRain (1298)By person wrote:

    such an intense sadness and relenquishing feel, building in heaviness, heartbreaking and tearing to say the least... the ending the final undoing... outstanding

  • Alanarchy On Friday, February 3, 2006, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    Jesus... I logged in specifically to comment on this work, but now, as I reach to find the words I may as well be gropeing for the moon. You got to me here, man. Just phenomonal.

  • sIo On Friday, February 3, 2006, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    rip me in two. please.

  • A former member wrote: "Yes. I'll be." I don't believe I can voice my opinions because they are silent and in contemplation. You have indeed awed me.

  • Crimson Shade On Friday, February 3, 2006, Crimson Shade (92)By person wrote:

    "life exists on the brink between what we live and what we see" - best line by far i think, so philosophical in its roots - second stanza stands out of the crowd here... fantastic write

  • A former member wrote: you don't just paint words. you paint scenes in which the words emerge from. at least that is what verse 2 did for me, set a scene of you in my mind, the rest emerged from that.

  • A former member wrote: wow. just..wow. i can't come up with a coherent comment, and for that i am sorry. but this is beautiful, jon.


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