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Triolet #1: I Had An Axe
By SilentStalker
*first attempt at such a format, and drunk at that; let me know what you
think*
I had an axe; she had no name
Her blade
was sharper than a knife
At night we play a little game
I
had an axe; she had no name
My love for her was set aflame
Whenever we would take a life
I had an axe; she had no name
Her blade was sharper than a knife
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© 2006 Darun Ferguson
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A former member wrote:
really nice poem. i like it. very well done
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On Wednesday, December 30, 2009, brideoframbo
(2)
wrote:
Iambic pentameter is the formal name for this style - you did a good job on this one. Keep up the writing.
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On Friday, February 3, 2006, A Burning God
(46) wrote:
very nice, I liked it a lot
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On Thursday, February 2, 2006, elisa
(1616) wrote:
....such a sweet sentiment of love.......gives me a warm feeling deep down.....*strokes cleaver*
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On Thursday, February 2, 2006, Thorn
(283) wrote:
I remember you typing this in the chat recently. I liked it then, so I'm glad you posted it.
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On Thursday, February 2, 2006, yslehc
(334) wrote:
you made that drunk? haha... i love the new format, it's creepy.. not that your writes arent always creepy. i bet you could do a really cool longer one with this kind of format.. hehe lovely job my dear.
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On Saturday, February 4, 2006, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...the triolet, and I always thought the repeating made it too simple to come up with something; guess you eventually figure out how to use it to heighten the main parts of a stanza...
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On Saturday, February 4, 2006, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...and I've decided to try this format for my second installment of my Stalker series; and that, and changing between second and third person, should add a little something to it...
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On Saturday, February 11, 2006, yslehc
(334) wrote:
add a lil crazyness to the creepyness? woo!.. hmm forums... i only half knew they existed here... or something....
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On Thursday, February 2, 2006, yslehc
(334) wrote:
PS. Don't die while you're away!
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On Saturday, February 4, 2006, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
..check the forums, young lady...
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A former member wrote:
intersting, freaky, scary, I freakin loved it ... good write
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On Wednesday, February 1, 2006, Broken_Wings12
(4) wrote:
I like it alot.
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A former member wrote:
The rhyming scheme is quite interesting.. it's got a good rhythm to it.. almost like hammering the words into my skull.. I'd like to see more of this, m'good sir. Love you, Darun.
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A former member wrote:
hmmm...interesting, I like it, very neat
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On Wednesday, February 1, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(564) wrote:
I like it nice write
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