aged paper [and broken glass]

By Six-Out

I'd rather watch tears roll down your face
than face this aged. framed-portrait of who you were.


we're never what we are. we were what we're meant to never be.
glass painted on a poem in a dark room. she'd cry
those blue-blood songs of ink running dry- and lead.hearted
silhouettes. and we wore the war paint of disaster
it followed us to our fate. tapered the wavering doubt.
drown it out. just drown it out.
in misconceptions

and I watched your smile crack. under pressure
these were no lines of age
stage-exit. style. only this time there was no one to applaud your bow


and these walls talk too much
we're sitting on cloud 9- and it's raining.
and I'm falling- born in the descent. waiting for the ground to give birth

because these stars never shut the fuck up


my hands are trembling.
and I'm waiting for you to shatter.
she's nothing.
and I'm waiting on that trigger finger to point the blame to me.

and her face runs under my tears. it's so beautiful.

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Copyright 2005 Jon Rodgers
Published on Sunday, August 14, 2005.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • Clydes_Bonnie On Thursday, May 10, 2012, Clydes_Bonnie (56)By person wrote:

    incredible

  • A former member wrote: love it, the ending is so real and it all means so much, relly great :o)

  • A former member wrote: Your writing is just so beautiful. Somewhat melancholy, but I love it.

  • Crysa On Thursday, September 29, 2005, Crysa (33)By person wrote:

    Someone suggested that I read your stuff, I'm very glad I did.

  • abattoir On Thursday, August 25, 2005, abattoir (115)By person wrote:

    again, I'm left enfeeble.by the way it was.were. and you new, inevitably, what it would become.your style is mindblowing.

  • Mahakala On Sunday, August 21, 2005, Mahakala (209)By person wrote:

    leaves me with the feeling of regret yet I don't think that I have done anything to regret (well at least not yet)...great write six..

  • TheBardOfBlasphemy On Sunday, August 21, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy (358)By person wrote:

    there are some killer lines in here... and the sense of it is borderline-pschotic, mournful, washed up, strung out, lost and lonely...

  • TheBardOfBlasphemy On Sunday, August 21, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy (358)By person wrote:

    on the flipside... i don't dig.the random fullstops... only because you're also using them in the "correct" fashion. What's wrong with any of these: "-" "_" "~" ":" etc... the meaning vanishes out of this here and there...

  • TheBardOfBlasphemy On Sunday, August 21, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy (358)By person wrote:

    get rid of those full stops. they fuck this up... unless you intend the reader to pause at those points... but that doesn't seem to fit... i even read it out loud to check...

  • Six-Out On Sunday, August 21, 2005, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Dramatic pauses, my male dear. ;)

  • A former member wrote: not bad

  • stormtalk On Monday, August 15, 2005, stormtalk (729)By person wrote:

    comment removed by DP admins

  • A former member wrote: Ground Control? Is this the lollipop factory?

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, August 16, 2005, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Are you calling me a sucker? ;)

  • glasshouse On Monday, August 15, 2005, glasshouse (548)By person wrote:

    Wow. Wow. -Glass

  • Rachel On Sunday, August 14, 2005, Rachel (213)By person wrote:

    Jesus...

  • Elegant Kiss On Sunday, August 14, 2005, Elegant Kiss (182)By person wrote:

    ... "because these stars never shut the fuck up".. ! I'll have to come back, you beautiful monster.

  • A former member wrote: speechless. i love this.

  • Possesion On Sunday, August 14, 2005, Possesion (137)By person wrote:

    So...amazing.

  • sIo On Sunday, August 14, 2005, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    dear god Jon. this made me cry.


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