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crush
By purr_verse
and as i stand outside your door,
just a little nervous in the starglow,
fireflies bring erratic flametouch to darkness
and my anticipation rivals their burning.
i have waited such a long time
for this moment.
i've brought you a present.
i love it
but i'll share.
i'm hoping it will touch your heart.
the moon casts a gentle luminance -
such beauty -
and i catch my breath
just a little.
my blade glitters silverbright
and your skin is so soft.
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Copyright 2005 Natalie Lyndon
Published on Thursday, May 5, 2005.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
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On Sunday, May 10, 2020, tonebone
(51)
wrote:
I see a near ferfect corrollation in "crush" and "pocketlife" I had to put them side by side to discern the differences but the...outcomes?...disturbingly similar. great poem!-s
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On Monday, May 11, 2020, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
Fuck, wow. Yes. They DO parallel, and I didn't even realise it until this comment. Holy crap. I promise I haven't actually stabbed anyone in reality.
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A former member wrote:
I love this one. I brought you a present...I hope it touches your heart...my blade glitters silverbright (= Delicious! Your work is really amazing, it's inspirational.
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On Monday, April 20, 2009, Railway_Butterfly
(354) wrote:
i completely forgot i'd already commented on this.. it's so lovely to come back and read all of these things through what are now such different eyes.. i still thought the same thing about the carol anne duffy poem, though. crush is one of my favourite words. :)
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A former member wrote:
..this was so softly illustrated to be so sharp and almost, dare I say it, unnerving..the end line is what did it for me..I held my breath for the whole of this..delicate hands sculpt the strongest images. This is stellar.
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On Thursday, September 1, 2005, Gideon Lost
(138) wrote:
Wow! The last 2 lines are a clencher. Freedom is a great gift. -Gideon
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On Thursday, August 18, 2005, Spiritus_Frumenti
(341) wrote:
i love this...sweet and lovely..."fireflies bring erratic flametouch to darkness /and my anticipation rivals their burning"..you are a goddess...-l-
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On Tuesday, July 19, 2005, blue
(1454) wrote:
holy shit lady!! thats the second time in a week.. smile, smile, gasp!! :) ~b
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On Monday, July 11, 2005, wannabe_rebel
(17) wrote:
thank you so much for the comment! you're an incredible writer and your visions are so crystal clear, it almost hurts.
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On Wednesday, July 6, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy
(358) wrote:
I was going to gag (being cynical & spitefully unlovalble) until I read the end. Deliciously evil. (the present) "I hope it will touch your heart" - so very un-divine.
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On Saturday, June 18, 2005, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
deviously delicious. I've missed reading you :) :::OLd
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On Saturday, June 4, 2005, jaunty pill
(47) wrote:
I also must mention that " silverbright " is a lovely combination...Which I often find in a lot of your work. It is nice to read you again. Often you leave me crippled.
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On Saturday, June 4, 2005, jaunty pill
(47) wrote:
I just wonder if it is a sin to indulge in such poetry today. ;) You always know how to strike a cord..Something near and dear to my own work. A female me maybe? Maybe not. Love it. Change nothing.
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A former member wrote:
"i'm hoping it will touch your heart." - chilling. Gets better with each read. Just marvelous.
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On Wednesday, May 18, 2005, flying_fox
(573) wrote:
bravo... just like Epi, I went back and read it again. Very clever indeed. xx
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On Saturday, May 14, 2005, Liz
(267) wrote:
...starglow, flametouch, silverbright... I love the imagery, how your descriptions fit the style to make everything luminous and tightly wound. Very beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful poetry. :-)
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A former member wrote:
"fireflies bring erratic flametouch to darkness" Like a steely blade in a silken sheath, it's hard to see what the truth is made of; a serpent's smile; the shadow under the door. There is something on the edge of horror creeping behind the moon's lumina
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A former member wrote:
... moon's luminance, here, make's me just a little nervous. Well written; I can feel the crush of gentle poetry heavy in the 'silverbright' of your poetic genious.
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, stuart_pid
(135) wrote:
i love the way you write and this is certainly no exception. i loved the ending. made me smile. good work.
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On Saturday, May 7, 2005, birdwell
(140) wrote:
after i read the ending, i went back and read it again... fantastic!! ~db~
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On Friday, May 6, 2005, Sepulcrawl
(78) wrote:
glad to have you back
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A former member wrote:
I loved this, purr. The unsettling undertone and deceptive style is beautifully distinguished. The misleading illusion is gently haunting and the last line was exquisite- Wonderfully memorbale. Your works possess such a unique feel. Outstanding.
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On Thursday, May 5, 2005, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
If I were Jon, I'd be sleeping with one eye open tonight, definitely DP material. S.
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A former member wrote:
that was really nice. i liked how you sort of give the illusion of something else...but i had a feeling what it was. good job.
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On Thursday, May 5, 2005, Railway_Butterfly
(354) wrote:
This really reminded me of a poem I once read by Carol Anne Duffy called 'Lovesick'.. though, I feel like this has a slightly different.. edge to it. Anyway, I loved this.. truly wonderful
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
dang! I'm so curious now...I searched on Google for this but can't find that specific piece, although I found other Duffy works - who I hadn't heard of before, so...new writer discovery for me! :)
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On Thursday, May 5, 2005, AniDayz
(820) wrote:
ahhh...beautifully chilling my bones...this is magnificent*
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On Thursday, May 5, 2005, Solace
(1069) wrote:
Oh love, your such a soppy romantic natalie, so beautiful...Is a letter opener a good gift to a love? Your judgement call not mine :)
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On Thursday, May 5, 2005, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
hehe excellent, so innocent appearing at first then the ending just gives a sly satisfying little chill....thanks for that ;)
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A former member wrote:
wicked
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