if my darling were a watermellon id tell gallagher where she was
By Jonas
like an experiment
almost
to see what happens
the end reaction
the dilapidated contraption that you have to drag out whenever you have
guests
a shotgun breaches the rapture
a knife in your own hand is harder
but nothing is faster
the end is the beginning is uncertain is unwilling to go forsaken and less
often thought of
like number three
rabies
foaming at the mouth
for a vice out of breath
but the resilience of the body namely the mind fills in the gaps of my
chemical contraption
nothing rises like this
eyes across the table
square
are always serious
law-abiding citizens never
get to feel this
never get to feel this
way
faded and fortunate in
feeling
jaded at the ever
flaming torch held up
by the spectre of true love biting his nails nervous always nervous always
a bundle of nerves
crazy and a little off
decisions
float like like an electric arc
up the coil of time
and i'd trade a rhyme for an indescretion anyday now that is a lie now
that is a lie
nothing empties the cyst
like the lance that are the words that are to say that this is all meaningless
this is all meaningless
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Comments on "if my darling were a watermellon id tell gallagher where she was"
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A former member wrote:
I find the way you write so appealing.I could mull over so many lines and get my self-medicated mind trapped inside this visual maze of a poem for a while...4th and 6th stanza are my favorite parts, but I need the poem in its entirety to feel the full aftermath of your effection....incredible.
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A former member wrote:
Wow.It took me a minute to take it all in.Impressive.
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On Thursday, September 1, 2005, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
I came back to read this one and enjoyed it once again. I also am very much looking forward to the final version of some of your musical pieces - I will definitely take you up on that. Ciao, T/S
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On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, Nomad
(38) wrote:
bang! up the coil of time with you, friend Jonas.
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On Wednesday, March 16, 2005, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
Fantastic!!!! I love your pieces, man. Good to have time to get on and see your venom scented roses gracing the page. Ciao, T/S
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On Monday, March 14, 2005, celestine_moon
(46) wrote:
a knife in your own hand is harder but nothing is faster --i've felt this before.
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On Monday, March 7, 2005, manywalks
(750) wrote:
this just wove its way tighter and tighter, laying something bare.
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On Wednesday, March 2, 2005, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
vorpal sharp in it its reach.........eloquent in its intelligence..........then sharp for the feel...........well, well done.....my friend............urban
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On Monday, February 28, 2005, Anth
(1133) wrote:
everyverse here, just something so impressive, your unique individual style at its best. its hard to comment on such skill
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A former member wrote:
seems you have not lost your touch with your worded paintbrush :) good write
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On Monday, February 28, 2005, elisa
(1616) wrote:
cut to the quick and left with a feeling of meaningless....i know these symptom~elisa
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A former member wrote:
ohhhh, no wonder you're royalty...nicely done :)
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On Monday, February 28, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(918) wrote:
this is worded very lovely...i loved it
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On Sunday, February 27, 2005, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
title + last 3 lines = teh secks.
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On Sunday, February 27, 2005, Jonas
(720) wrote:
here's a directly post heartbreak piece for ya.