I

By DarkSoul

With heavy heart in hand,
I break.

Like waves upon the rocky shore,
I crash.

Now with a crimson smile,
I bleed.

A shouting voice proclaims to you,
I love.

You leave and like a mute,
I fail.

With shattered heart and broken mind,
I tried.

But in that moment you left,
I died.

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Copyright 2005 DarkSoul
Published on Thursday, January 20, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • thelostmessenger On Tuesday, December 4, 2007, thelostmessenger (112)By person wrote:

    the ending IS beautiful... just... beautiful. nice write. *messenger

  • Moonflower On Sunday, June 24, 2007, Moonflower (301)By person wrote:

    oh i loved the ending best. but it all was so lovely ;)

  • Jaded Ireland On Tuesday, June 20, 2006, Jaded Ireland (26)By person wrote:

    :)

  • Myrrhkuri the fallen one On Monday, November 28, 2005, Myrrhkuri the fallen one (94)By person wrote:

    I like this..short simple and tragic

  • abattoir On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir (115)By person wrote:

    I loved the way one can read this in two ways, separatly...beautiful wrt.

  • Forgotten Angel On Tuesday, February 1, 2005, Forgotten Angel (310)By person wrote:

    speechless..fantastic..beautiful...wonderfull! All my scars-inside and out are alive to memories..fantastic write! -Kel

  • A former member wrote: Beautiful.. - Holly

  • A former member wrote: Wow...that just struck a knife through my heart. Every loss I have endured in life just rekindled fresh to memory. Nicely written.

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