ash.

By Exodus



Where your sky is bleached ivory white.

I see where I’ve wounded you many times.


I am a thorn as you walk by, sip your blood as I puncture you slight.ly




In your plastic, icy widows. I see clear where I have torn into your night worn dreams.

Wintered to the touch, I try to hold you. I am broken into fragments of velvet rain.

That simply fall off your skin to form a puddle you step in.





Wear your uniformed faces, as you pass the world by in (skipping-record pace.
And I will hold off on tireless goodbyes


For the good time
being.

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Copyright 2005 Exodus
Published on Wednesday, January 5, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Shaded_Iris On Wednesday, October 17, 2018, Shaded_Iris (86)By person wrote:

    Intriguing. A cryptic vibe. I wonder if I played it backwards. "Much Respect *Given*

  • A former member wrote: Love what you got while you got it. It's the only thing that makes sense anymore.

  • A former member wrote: "Wintered to the touch, I try to hold you. I am broken into fragments of velvet rain." ..deep and impacting, overall..but that line iced over my skin in some fashion..definitely stands out..your words have a lovely haunt to them.

  • A former member wrote: awsome!!!!!!! keep it dark

  • A former member wrote: "I see where I’ve wounded you many times." This is darkly romantic, like stareing at a lover's eyes over the burning end of a cigarette; reflecting pain & beauty. This poem feels like a painting; beautiful.

  • stormtalk On Thursday, January 6, 2005, stormtalk (729)By person wrote:

    Your work always makes me think "ethereal"; I'm not sure why. But this was colorful, detached, a disaessembled assembly of sad thoughts... nicely written.

  • lordshadow On Thursday, January 6, 2005, lordshadow (153)By person wrote:

    whoa...

  • Gideon Lost On Wednesday, January 5, 2005, Gideon Lost (138)By person wrote:

    Whoah, nice write here. I like the image of being stepped in. Great piece.

  • ShadowFlight On Wednesday, January 5, 2005, ShadowFlight (105)By person wrote:

    Wow... marvelously done... The images fall and coat... like ash from a fire.. well done, a fav

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