the sin

By mysticventures





ripped from the heart of man

a helpless soul

is left floundering

in oblivion

.

.

.

such is the sin

.

.

.

of suicide






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Copyright 2004 mysticventures
Published on Sunday, November 14, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: well worded and short. it coaxed a few tears out of me

  • italianbella On Monday, January 28, 2008, italianbella (185)By person wrote:

    powerful intence great write

  • SorrowSoul On Saturday, June 25, 2005, SorrowSoul (54)By person wrote:

    So much is said with these chosen words. Very well done

  • A former member wrote: wow..u really captured the feeling with this...it was awesome

  • Mr King On Sunday, December 12, 2004, Mr King (547)By person wrote:

    Ouch.. Powerful thunderingly direct piece! That one hurt. Excellent write. 1, Seth

  • A former member wrote: remindes me of me. very compelling work. even though its short, it makes perfect sence. very awesome.

  • A former member wrote: It's nice to see a piece like this that rises above instead of descending below.

  • Lotophagi On Saturday, November 20, 2004, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    very powerful and compelling.... short, emphatical, and punctuated brilliantly. Awesome write.

  • A former member wrote: Aint that the truth. Cool pc brother I like it.

  • JiNx On Monday, November 15, 2004, JiNx (98)By person wrote:

    Wow not sure what to even say... Great write -JiNx(ie)

  • sIo On Monday, November 15, 2004, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    good reminder to all those on dp.

  • DarkWolf On Monday, November 15, 2004, DarkWolf (415)By person wrote:

    ..this is powerful.. you take away all the romantacism placed on suicide.. that is certainly a good thing.. -Michael

  • mysticventures On Sunday, November 14, 2004, mysticventures (538)By person wrote:

    my thanks and love to you Zhee :)

  • A former member wrote: Agreed.

  • Zhee On Sunday, November 14, 2004, Zhee (529)By person wrote:

    you captured this magnificently! absolutely brilliant... loved it....*favs*

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