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"Here birdy-birdy"
By Storm
In your dazy haze of paralysed fear
You lie, grasping for air
And every strained breath rips like claws
Inside of your bleeding lungs.
-Plead for revelation,
You'll get none.
another broken bone
and the pain that cuts you like a rusty knife
forces you back:
...euphoric reveries shatter like glass
against your wall of exquisite suffering...
[Come back To Life]
Spread your wings,
Flap, oh so pitiful.
Then fall once more;
defeated.
While the worlds all unfortunate
Take it all out on you.
"Now flap your wings..."
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Copyright 2004 Storm
Published on Tuesday, November 2, 2004.
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A former member wrote:
good with words
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A former member wrote:
"...euphoric reveries shatter like glass" Nicely done.
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A former member wrote:
that is great, I like your use of words
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A former member wrote:
This is utterly astounding. Delicate, beautiful, hazy beams of muted light reflecting from a small life. . extroardinary ~ Rose
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On Thursday, November 25, 2004, Malice In Wonderland
(987)
wrote:
Stormie, this is wonderful, your way with words will never cease to amaze me... Kya
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On Thursday, November 4, 2004, BleedSilver
(298) wrote:
It has been a while since I have read one of your poems, stormy. '...euphoric reveries shatter like glass against your wall of exquisite suffering...' This was my favorite part...Great job, cutie. =)
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On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
this was really intense... strong at the same time.. you captured the essence so beautifully...
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On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, Lynaes
(859) wrote:
"euphoric reveries shatter like glass against your wall of exquisite suffering" such a fantastic line.. I too felt this and it was indeed intense.. so much anguish and belittlement.. Excellent work.
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On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
Wow, you have a way with words..painfully struggling and not giving up, very intense I loved this ^_^
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On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, Solace
(1069) wrote:
I told you I loved this one...And I do really, the imagery of sucking for air, pain filled lungs is just a horror in and of itself... [Come back to life] Can they, can anyone get up off and fly, perhaps, maybe if we just flap our wings we can fly...
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On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, glasshouse
(548) wrote:
Oh my. This was so intense and so raw. I FELT every single word you wrote and THAT is amazing. I could peel this apart with quotes that I loved... wow. I felt a cage. I felt a bloody cage. -Glass
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On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
wow, this is so powerful, you present the pain so visually, "And every strained breath rips like claws Inside of your bleeding lungs"..... and that last line.... I just love it, am in love with it. Thank you.
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On Tuesday, November 2, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti
(341) wrote:
metaphorical or not...this is still worthy of reverence...-l-
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