The Great Defeat....

By Zhee

My stethoscope crawls down
Listening to the marauded heart,
That convulses with every breath
As blood rents its flesh apart.

Taut and tense it strains to hear
The mangled muscle choke,
The frantic flailing, the faltering,
When the crystal voice broke.

Clutching fast to the friable skin
My terrified stethoscope pleads –
To life deserting the wreckage
Where the perished heart bleeds.

Paralyzed, it embraces my neck,
Nestling inside my white coat,
As we nod our confirmatory defeat
And battle the lump in our throat.






(i guess pronouncing someone dead is one of the hardest things i have had to do...)

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Copyright 2004 Zheala
Published on Friday, October 8, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • blue On Tuesday, February 21, 2006, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    Wow, what a thing to have to describe, without your footnote I do not believe this write could be fully understood or appreciated. Life it seems is without full realization without first experiencing it's frail finite course. *blessings* ~b

  • Zahgurim On Thursday, October 28, 2004, Zahgurim (29)By person wrote:

    Raw emotion with blood spewing out of my monitor. I lick it to taste the pain I see. This mad me sad, but in a sadist kinda way. It's a good way though. I love this poem. PS-I failed at being "artsy-fartsy" with this comment. But it deserved a try.

  • stuart_pid On Tuesday, October 12, 2004, stuart_pid (135)By person wrote:

    i think i may actually cry. you have really touched me zhee.

  • A former member wrote: wow zheala ...you have turned prolific....nice..

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Sunday, October 10, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    Very well done piece! It reflects the experience of your explanatory comment at the bottom, but I think it conjures imagery that transcends this, as well. Before I saw the note, Scholar

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Sunday, October 10, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    I was effected by the piece in a different way and had already read it a second time. Very well written. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • girlafraid On Friday, October 8, 2004, girlafraid (480)By person wrote:

    this was incredible...i'm sorry you had to go through it, but the work is exceptional. I'm glad this isn't part of my job....

  • Ravenblade On Friday, October 8, 2004, Ravenblade (313)By person wrote:

    this was amazing man, and I usually don't take time to read shorter writes like this....>Raven

  • Anth On Friday, October 8, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    such strong emotions and concept here,striking work and excellently written

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