Closed Doors Of Perception

By Zhee

Taste the bitter, impotent mind
Fraught with self-deception,
Excised from existence, cowers
Behind closed doors of perception.

Broken mirrors strewn, reflect
Nakedness of the necrotic core,
Torment licks the bleeding brain
Like the ravenous, bestial whore.

Buried in the apathetic, barren cell,
Fetid stench of pestilent conformity,
As blinded vision is left clawing
At the scabbed face of reality.

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Copyright 2004 Zheala
Published on Tuesday, October 5, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • prodigy789 On Saturday, June 23, 2012, prodigy789 (32)By person wrote:

    i love the gruesome metaphores. great job

  • A former member wrote: wow that was disturbingly good

  • A former member wrote: ouch, remind me not to get you too analyze me, you cut deeper than the bone lol. very well done.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Sunday, October 10, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    Great imagery in this piece, I love your closing thoughts "As blinded vision is left clawing At the scabbed face of reality". Scholar

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Sunday, October 10, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    I just read one by purr-verse called "exercise in duality" that also used the mirror as a device to explore self perception/deception that you might enjoy reading given your thoughts here. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Belle On Friday, October 8, 2004, Belle (17)By person wrote:

    Oh my god. You should write lyrics for death metal bands. SO FREAKING COOL. I

  • sixsixnine On Wednesday, October 6, 2004, sixsixnine (477)By person wrote:

    line after line .. jaw dropping! i'll have to read more later.. must go now, take care..

  • A former member wrote: this is an excellent example of amazing writing skillz*Scandal*

  • K_Love On Tuesday, October 5, 2004, K_Love (525)By person wrote:

    Shredding and tearing work I loved every word, the 2nd stanza was my favorite. Beautiful and heart clenching. ~Kirsten~

  • A former member wrote: Beautifully well-written piece, very explicit. Keep up the good work. "WilliaM"

  • BeautifulCalamity On Tuesday, October 5, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428)By person wrote:

    i actually liked the second stanza best, the third stanza was very great though, i think this is a very well written piece, that seemingly captures lots of feelings..brought alot to mind..

  • Angst Queen On Tuesday, October 5, 2004, Angst Queen (370)By person wrote:

    the last stanza is quite something. i like how you did this

  • A former member wrote: This also seems to remind me of Jim Morrison, in some perverse way.

  • A former member wrote: I enjoyed the lines, "torment licks the bleeding brain, like the ravenous, bestial whore." These 2 lines remind me of Cerberus, the 3-headed dog. :) You see this every day. Most of us can only think about it. Fewer still can eloquenly express it. ~Shane

  • A former member wrote: This brought me to my knees. Usually when that happens, I falter, and cannot get back up. ~Shane~

  • A former member wrote: oh very nice I especially liked the last stanza *picks scab off face*

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