-tears. of_ lead

By Six-Out

like a lipstick note on the bathroom mirror
your words reflect your [lies]
_:take time 'sweetypie';
as you slam your fist into me- and watch your world shatter



miss-materialistic /drama/queen.
licking my wounds _with your tongue of ::salt
such a [p.i.t.i-ful] excuse
of _something_ -once worth trying for

-
like a broken-hearted goodbye; on a splintered summer morning
your -tears of lead- fall into my chest
hollowpoints:: on silk wings of perfections
ripping [for-got/en] dreams from a fragile mind
my dahlia:; on a funeral wreath
I never saw you wilt

[love was your mask]


but
like a lipstick note on a bathroom mirror
you can be washed away

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Copyright 2004 Six-Out
Published on Sunday, October 3, 2004.     Filed under: "Rage" and "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: there is nothing that cant be washed away.....or at least that what ive heard....then again, you shouldnt believe everything you read on the internet.....oh, yeah, great poem :)

  • Miztaken4beauty On Thursday, March 25, 2010, Miztaken4beauty (177)By person wrote:

    It's captivating.

  • empty_love On Friday, May 13, 2005, empty_love (15)By person wrote:

    "You can be washed away," thats something great right there.

  • Kinkypoptart On Thursday, April 21, 2005, Kinkypoptart (555)By person wrote:

    I Always enjoy your works. This was beautiful and i'm sure thats obvious to you. Good write ~*~Tart~*~

  • Solace On Monday, February 7, 2005, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    lots of people swear while commenting on your writing, i guess thats either because they suck at comments or lack the words to describe the feeling this gives, a bit of both probably :)

  • A former member wrote: "like a lipstick note on the bathroom mirror your words reflect your [lies]" Stunning[w/ teeth]! Like the words of a prophet written on subway walls... Bam! (the formatting is delicious:perfect) bravo!

  • A former member wrote: "my dahlia:; on a funeral wreath I never saw you wilt"..this was magnificant. every chord seemed to echo through my head and it captured all the disappointment entrapped in this piece. i love it.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Wednesday, October 13, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    I love the flow and feel of this piece - my favourite lines out of many good ones are "on a splintered summer morning your -tears of lead- fall into my chest hollowpoints:: on silk wings of perfections". Scholar

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Wednesday, October 13, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    The contrasting images of tears, hollowpoints and silk wings intertwined in that description are so effective in conveying the mixed emotions present when a romance is over... Really great job. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Sunday, October 10, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (341)By person wrote:

    truly brilliant...my dahlia:; on a funeral wreath I never saw you wilt "...jesus...-l-

  • knightmirror On Saturday, October 9, 2004, knightmirror (426)By person wrote:

    can you say faves.....i don't know how the fuck you do it mothatha but this is pure isolated beauty...loved every emotion...****-much love,chris

  • KittyStryker On Friday, October 8, 2004, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    lipstick is bloody hell to get off anything, but it can be done. usually with chemicals or the sleeve of a current lover. :D

  • Amanda Parnell On Wednesday, October 6, 2004, Amanda Parnell (57)By person wrote:

    reflection is everything. *queenie*

  • mysticventures On Wednesday, October 6, 2004, mysticventures (538)By person wrote:

    the imagery was excellent Six - truely a heartfelt write !!

  • purr_verse On Monday, October 4, 2004, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    wraps itself up gloriously; "on a splintered summer morning" - love this image... "licking my wounds _with your tongue of ::salt" - extremely powerful; perfectly bitter; great write.

  • OLd SouL On Monday, October 4, 2004, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    that was some seriously kick ass writing Mr. Six. "like a broken-hearted goodbye..." verse.. crazy good shtuff. Love it man. :::OLd

  • Sin On Monday, October 4, 2004, Sin (1168)By person wrote:

    wow,this left me breathless, and no i am not just saying that because you are popular. you are truly amazing ~kristy

  • A former member wrote: This came to me in pieces...I had to read it slowly to get the full effect. Sensational.

  • Malice In Wonderland On Monday, October 4, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (987)By person wrote:

    WOW...my favorite of yours, or one of them, great job Jon Kya Scholar

  • A former member wrote: fucking amazing. Scholar

  • DoctorAsh On Monday, October 4, 2004, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    Very nice you plastic sheep farm. I like the trendy decorations you inserted into the write. Lets us fuck. [D&A]

  • Zhee On Monday, October 4, 2004, Zhee (529)By person wrote:

    wow! i loved this! truly superb...*favs*

  • Anth On Monday, October 4, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    id say this was one of your best,until your next post i guess,stunning poetry here though

  • A former member wrote: wow; brillant, John... I can call you John, can't I? good! such a unique style, as well. Wow; chris was right, I don't know what I've been missing

  • Six-Out On Monday, October 4, 2004, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Na, but you can call me Jon ;)

  • A former member wrote: amazing ...i cant even think of anything to say that would justify this work...but as i am told by many your ego is already the size of the sun and i wouldnt want to enlarg it any more...its for your own good though

  • Ravenblade On Monday, October 4, 2004, Ravenblade (313)By person wrote:

    this was amazing six, I've felt things similar to this, and I hate the feelings, but years of it I've grown cold and numb to its pain, oh well....my favorite line "licking my wounds _with your tongue of ::salt"...>Raven

  • Ravenblade On Monday, October 4, 2004, Ravenblade (313)By person wrote:

    and as always I love the style, I still wish I was experimental enough to do something similar...kep it up...>Raven

  • Seraphic On Sunday, October 3, 2004, Seraphic (209)By person wrote:

    Sixie...your works lately are so angry and sad...*hugs* I hope one silly female didn't ruin your view on all of us :) Nicely written btw *~seraph~*


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